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2014-09-11 · 첨삭 강사 Jessie

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What benefits other than personal satisfaction could you personally get by volunteering? Because of my volunteering, other people can feel comfortable and stability. So they can think that I am a good person. Then their treatment to me can be different

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Hello there! Thank you for sharing your idea about this. Anyway, please always remember that punctuation mark and capitalization is important in writing. Keep on expressing your ideas unhesitatingly Paul. Try to make your answers longer. Have a good day! ~T. Jessie~ What benefits other than personal satisfaction could you personally get by volunteering?Because of my volunteering, other people can feel comfortable and stability. >> Because of volunteering, other people can feel comfortable and stable. So they can think that I am a good person. >> Correct! Then their treatment to me can be different >> Then their treatment to me can be different. OR>> Then they can treat me better than other people. 

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