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2015-02-09 · 첨삭 강사 Chloe

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I disagree about this opinion. I think past parents didn't give attention more than modern parents, because Korea had patriarchal system, so chidren couldn't talk freely to their father. Also, past parents usually didn't help their childrens's studying, but modern parents are always care and help them. Many people say 'modern parents are just focus on their working', but I think past parents were more focus on their working than modern, because they had to do their farming. With these reasons, I disagree that modern parents are not focus on their children

강사 첨삭

The lack of attention from parents to their children is getting worse which did not happen earlier. This is because parents have to take more rest after work or they have to work overtime continuously. Besides that, spending time with their children requires them to have more knowledge than before. -Teacher Chloe I disagree about this opinion. >>I disagree with this opinion. I think past parents didn\'t give attention more than modern parents, because Korea had patriarchal system, so chidren couldn\'t talk freely to their father. >>I think parents in the past didn\'t give much time to their children. Because of the patriarchal system, children couldn\'t talk freely to their father. Also, past parents usually didn\'t help their childrens\'s studying, but modern parents are always care and help them. >>Also, parents in the past do not help their children to study. These days, parents always take care and help their children. Many people say \'modern parents are just focus on their working\', but I think past parents were more focus on their working than modern, because they had to do their farming. >>Many people say that modern parents just focus on their work but I think parents in the past were focused more on their work.With these reasons, I disagree that modern parents are not focus on their children >>With these reasons, I disagree that modern parents are not focused on their children.

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