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Hi there, Juhee!^^
Thank you very much for sharing your opinion about welfare benefits. I really hope that our governments consider the welfare of the people - especially the poor. Have a great day! Smile always.
~Kelly^^
A: Personally, I think all citizens have to get government welfare benefits because it\'s their concession however it has to be offered by depending on an income level and the standard living.
>> Personally, I think all citizens should be entitled to government welfare benefits because it\'s their concession. However, it has to be offered depending on their income level and standard of living.
We live in capitalism society ,some people are rich and don\'t have to worry about their welfare benefits but low-income families or poor senior citizens might need government support.
>> Correct.
*** Please take note of the proper punctuation: We live in capitalism society. Some people are rich and don\'t have to worry about their welfare benefits, but low-income families or poor senior citizens might need government support.
It doesn\'t mean they don\'t work hard there might be lots of difficulties.
>> Correct.
*** Please take note of the proper punctuation: It doesn\'t mean they don\'t work hard, there might be lots of difficulties.
For example immigrants need a time to adopt their new life and it takes time to make plenty of money also senior citizens who want to work nobody hires them so they need supports too.
>> For example, immigrants need time to adapt their new life and to make plenty of money. Also, nobody wants to hire senior citizens who want to work, so they need support, too.
It sounds like a unfair however if government doesn\'t help them poor people get poorer and richs get richer.
>> It sounds unfair, however, if the government doesn\'t help the poor people, they will become poorer and the rich becomes richer.
it might occur discrimination too.
>> There might be discrimination too.
I think that is government job to make a better life for everybody and make more an equal society.
>> I think, that is the government\'s job - to provide a better life for everybody and create a fair and equal society.
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