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Good morning Juhee!^^
Thank you for sharing your insights about bullying. Bullying affects lots of young people and happens in many schools. Many people are the victim of bullying and it is important to remember that no one should be bullied.
~Kelly^^
It\'s a quite difficult topic to talk about.
>> It\'s quite a difficult topic to talk about.
I guess that it depends on people who get bullied and how much damage they get.
>> I guess that it depends on the people who get bullied and how much damage they get.
In the school, we unconsciously bully to our friends like a funny way.
>> In the school, we unconsciously bully our friends in a funny way.
I\'m sure that it would be just a little joke, part of growing up.
>> Correct.
OR:
>> I am sure that it\'s just a joke, which is part of growing up.
Although it\'s a not serious bully ,they should be punished according to the school rule.
>> Although it\'s not a serious form of bullying, they should be punished according to the school rule.
>> Although the bullies where not serious, they should be punished according to the school rule.
Meanwhile,they might realize that what they do and how foolish they were.
>> Meanwhile, they might realize what they did and how foolish they were.
However,If people bully others like a serious violent way and they can\'t take a funny way, it must need a certain regulation.
>> However, if people bully others in a violent way and not in a fun way, it must need a certain regulation.
Those things happened everywhere. Such as school, at work and so on.
>> Those things happened everywhere, such as at school, at work and in other places.
Especially, being violent bulling in the school is a pretty serious issue in Korea.
>> Especially, violent bullying in the school is a pretty serious issue in Korea.
>> Violent bullying is pretty serious in Korea.
There are some students are bullied from their classmates who are physically strong than them.
>> There are some students who are being bullied by their classmates who are physically stronger than them.
The problem is, mostly, they attack people who are weaker than them.
>> Correct.
It might cause future violence too, when they grow up.
>> Correct.
Unfortunately, the victims must struggle for their affront forever.
>> Correct.
-thx Kelly-
>> Correct.
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