H.W In your opinion, what should be done to stop the spreading of coronavirus?
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Although there are a lot of foreign news that claims Korean government is doing well in terms of controlling coronavirus,
there are fundamental flaws in the measures that the government has been taking.
First, to lower the possibilities of spreading disease, the government should force all the non-essential facilities stop,
For example, night clubs, bars, red light districts, cafes, restaurants.
Secondly, they should ban visitors coming in to the country temporarily. Most of the countries are already doing it to control
the number of patients coming in to their territory. I think this is very important because the medical system won\'t function
properly if we can not lower the cases.
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In your opinion, what should be done to stop the spreading of coronavirus?
Although there are a lot of foreign news that claims Korean government is doing well in terms of controlling coronavirus, there are fundamental flaws in the measures that the government has been taking.
>>CORRECT!
OR>>Although there are news that claims how Korean government is doing well in terms of controlling coronavirus, there are still flaws on the measures that they are doing.
First, to lower the possibilities of spreading disease, the government should force all the non-essential facilities stop, For example, night clubs, bars, red light districts, cafes, restaurants.
>>First, to lower the possibilities of spreading disease, the government should force all the non-essential facilities stop such as night clubs, bars, red light districts, cafes, and restaurants.
Secondly, they should ban visitors coming in to the country temporarily.
>>CORRECT!
OR>>Secondly, they should temporarily not allow foreigners to enter the country.
Most of the countries are already doing it to control the number of patients coming in to their territory.
>>Most of the countries are already doing it to control the spreading of virus in their territory.
I think this is very important because the medical system won\'t function properly if we can not lower the cases.
>>I think this is very important because the medical system won\'t function properly if we can not lower the number of cases.
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