H.w P.22

2023-03-16 · 첨삭 강사 Lexie

학생이 쓴 원문

People like to interpret arts by themselves. However, some people hesitate to appreciate art. Because they think that art is difficult to take in, or it’s too expensive. I think government can encourage people to participate in some art acticities. For instance, there were some activities, kind of design festival in Seoul. Those were for citizens. They participated in the drawing section with color paints. I remember that a lot of people enjoyed the events. This is because they did not have any pressure for drawing well. They could just enjoy it. Another way to make people enjoy art more is producing more free concerts in public places. In fact, a lot of public places are generating many concerts. For example, in Incheon airport, it has regular concerts. Many people enjoyed the performances because it was free. Of course, the government paid money for the musicians. If they produce more concerts, it will be a good opportunity for people to enjoy art more.

강사 첨삭

Hello!


Thank you for accomplishing your homework! Writing some sentences in English also contribute to your constant practice. Stay positive, work hard, and success will be knocking on your door. Keep up the good work! I believe in you. 

~ T. Lexie

People like to interpret arts by themselves.
>> CORRECT!
Because they think that art is difficult to take in, or it’s too expensive.
>> Because they think art is difficult to take part in or it’s too expensive.
I think government can encourage people to participate in some art activities. 
>> I think the government can encourage people to participate in some art activities. 
For instance, there were some activities, kind of design festival in Seoul. 
>> For instance, there were some activities like festival designing in Seoul. 
Those were for citizens. 
>> CORRECT!
They participated in the drawing section with color paints.
>> People participated in the painting competition.
I remember that a lot of people enjoyed the events. 
>>  I remember that a lot of them enjoyed the events. 
This is because they did not have any pressure for drawing well.
>> This is because they did not feel any pressure to draw well.
They could just enjoy it.
>> CORRRECT!
Another way to make people enjoy art more is producing more free concerts in public places. 
>> Another way to make people enjoy art more is to produce more free concerts in public places. 
In fact, a lot of public places are generating many concerts. 
>> In fact, a lot of public places are holding many concerts. 
For example, in Incheon airport, it has regular concerts.
>> For example, there are regular concerts at Incheon airport
Many people enjoyed the performances because it was free.
>> Many people enjoy the performances because they are free.
Of course, the government paid money for the musicians.
>> Of course, the government pays money for the musicians.
If they produce more concerts, it will be a good opportunity for people to enjoy art more.
>>CORRECT!

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