Halo~ :-)

2011-04-06 · 첨삭 강사 Venus

학생이 쓴 원문

Beautiful day, dear. I had a good time while talking on the phone with you. I will not take our class tomorrow. As you told me ealrier, I will take to review. And I would like to talk about my favorite restaurant and my typical weekend on the next meeting. Is it okay? But I'm going to write about my favorite restaurant only. Because it is limited to 800 words. My favorite restaurant is 'outback' where is located in downtown. There is located on the second floor and gives me a feeling like entering the vessel. The place sell western food. I go to there on special days like family affair and anniversary. Because the service is very kind and the food is good. The bread's taste which gives us as appetizer is very delicious. Ms. [Name] I already miss your clear voice.

강사 첨삭

Hi! Thank you for the compliment regarding my voice. Goddluck on your review. :)

 

Beautiful day, dear.

>>It is a beautiful day, dear.

I had a good time while talking on the phone with you.

>> I had a good time talking on the phone with you.

I will not take our class tomorrow.

>> CORRECT.

As you told me ealrier, I will take to review.

>> As you told me earlier, I should review.

And I would like to talk about my favorite restaurant and my typical weekend on the next meeting. Is it okay?

>> Is it okay if I talk about my favorite restaurant, and my typical weekend during the next meeting?

But I'm going to write about my favorite restaurant only.

>> I'm only going to write about my favorite restaurant .

Because it is limited to 800 words.

>> CORRECT.

My favorite restaurant is 'outback' where is located in downtown.

>> My favorite restaurant is 'Outback'. It is located downtown.

There is located on the second floor and gives me a feeling like entering the vessel.

>> It is located on the second floor and it gives me a feeling like I am entering a vessel.

The place sell western food.

>> The place offers western food.

I go to there on special days like family affair and anniversary.

>> I go there on special days like family affairs and anniversaries.

Because the service is very kind and the food is good.

>> It is because their service is very prompt, people are kind, and the food is good.

The bread's taste which gives us as appetizer is very delicious.

>> They give us bread as an appetizer. It is very delicious.

Ms. [Name]

>> CORRECT.

I already miss your clear voice.

>> CORRECT.

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