Hannah, could you check these sentences?

Q: It is important to dress well if they want to be successful Many people judge a person by a first impression. So, if you wear good quality clothes, you can be shown as high class members to others. I think it is very important to be success. Also, if you dress well, people will be interested in you. You can make friends easily. In my case, I always dress well at the important meeting. I could make many friends easily and I can hang out with them continually. Q: If someone wants to learn a language in Korea, what are the things that he can do? First, I can go to academies. It is about 100 dollars per month. In my case, I went to NEXT academy to learn English. It was very efficient because there are many experienced teachers. Secondly, I made a foreign friend. He’s name is jack. We talk in English about movies frequently. It enhances my English skill. Also, it is free. So I could save my money.

Hello there [이름]! Thank you for asking for my help.^O^ I\'m pleased about that. kkkkk So I have my corrections for you below and check them out again for me! Bye now! ~t. Hannah~ Q: It is important to dress well if they want to be successfulMany people judge a person by a first impression. >>Correct! Or>>A lot of judge a person by their first impression.So, if you wear good quality clothes, you can be shown as high class members to others. >>Correct Or>>So once you wear good clothes, you arte considered as a high class member.I think it is very important to be success. >>I guess its important if you want to become successful.Also, if you dress well, people will be interested in you. >>Correct!You can make friends easily.>>Correct! In my case, I always dress well at the important meeting. >>Well in my case, I always dress up well for important meetings. I could make many friends easily and I can hang out with them continually. >>Correct!Q: If someone wants to learn a language in Korea, what are the things that he can do?First, I can go to academies. >>Correct Or>>I can enroll to academies.  It is about 100 dollars per month. >>Correct!  In my case, I went to NEXT academy to learn English. >>Correct!  It was very efficient because there are many experienced teachers. >>Correct!Secondly, I made a foreign friend. >>Correct! He’s name is jack. >>His name was Jack. We talk in English about movies frequently. >>We talked in English all the time about movies.  It enhances my English skill. >>Correct! Or>>It actually enhances my English skills.Also, it is free. >>Correct! So I could save my money. >>Correct!