Hannah, could you check these sentences?

Q: among Korean food, which do you think foreigners would love to eat? I think foreigners would love KIMCHI stew. KIMCHI stew is a traditional Korean food. Its taste is very good and recipe is simple. All I have to do is slicing KIMCHI and boiling it with water. KIMCHI stew is good for your health because it has lots of nutrition. If you visit Korea, I want to cook KIMCHI stew for you. Q: everyone knows the fact that physical activity is good for our children’s growth. Suggest one of them. There are many activities good for our children’s health. I want to recommend soccer to them. It relives their stress. They can improve their body condition and stay health by playing soccer because soccer is a tough sport. Also, they can learn team work. In my case, I have played soccer with my friends. Soccer is a team play sport. So I could acquire team work and communication skill.

Hello there [이름]!^_____^ Wow you really are doing your best to learn! I have some corrections again, check them ou! See you! ~t. Hannah~ Q: among Korean food, which do you think foreigners would love to eat?I think foreigners would love KIMCHI stew. >>Correct!KIMCHI stew is a traditional Korean food. >>Correct!  Its taste is very good and recipe is simple. >>It tastes good and the recipe is easy to do.All I have to do is slicing KIMCHI and boiling it with water. >>Correct!KIMCHI stew is good for your health because it has lots of nutrition. >>Correct!If you visit Korea, I want to cook KIMCHI stew for you.>>Correct!^^Q: everyone knows the fact that physical activity is good for our children’s growth. Suggest one of them.There are many activities good for our children’s health. >>Correct!I want to recommend soccer to them. >>I recommend soccer to them.  It relives their stress.>>It will reliev stress. They can improve their body condition and stay health by playing soccer because soccer is a tough sport.>>Correct! Also, they can learn team work. >>Also, they will learn team work.In my case, I have played soccer with my friends. >>Correct! Soccer is a team play sport. >>Correct! So I could acquire team work and communication skill. >>Correct!