Happiness and money

2021-08-05 · 첨삭 강사 Sharon

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Money isn\'t everything in our lives, but it is essential for us to live. So we try to get a lot of money because it is related to our happiness. However if we have too much money, we may be unhappy. There is such a saying in our country. \"The more money you have, the more you worry about it.\" I wonder how much money it is appropriate to have.

강사 첨삭

Hi [이름] Ha!
Your statement truly made me think.
I think that is the badge of good writing.
You engage your audience.^^
~~ Teacher Sharon
Money isn\'t everything in our lives, but it is essential for us to live.
>> Correct
So we try to get a lot of money because it is related to our happiness.
>> Correct
However if we have too much money, we may be unhappy.
>> Correct
There is such a saying in our country.
>> Correct
\"The more money you have, the more you worry about it.\"
>> Correct
I wonder how much money it is appropriate to have.
>> I wonder how much money that is appropriate to have.

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