Happy birth day to you

2011-05-02 · 첨삭 강사 Connie

학생이 쓴 원문

Hello Ella! Today is your birthday Until just while ago,I have knew thant your birthday is on 5/1 Anyway Happy birthday to you! Let your boy friend buy a 'Kinnect'! I wanna buy it for you, but I can't do it...because.......:) As I told you before, you can't play games with this alone. You should buy a 'Xbox360' either.lol So you should tell your boyfriend that "I wanna have Kinnect pakage'! Good luck!! What would the song I'll sing next time be?

강사 첨삭

Dear [이름] [이름], You're such a thoughtful student..(but you are stingy because you don't want to send me a Kinect!)hahaha. But you made me happy when you greeted me happy birthday even if you got the date wrong.haha. Maybe you should drink a memory medicine because you are becoming a "Harabuchi".hahaha. I hope my boyfriend will become very rich so he will buy me a Kinect package plus a super big LCD tv!haha. Hmm.. next meeting just prepare any English song you know. Thanks so much my good student! xoxo, ~teacher Ella^^ Hello Ella! >>Hello, Ella! Today is your birthday >>CORRECTUntil just while ago,I have knew thant your birthday is on 5/1 >>Until just a while ago, I had known that your birthday was on May 1st. Anyway Happy birthday to you!>>CORRECTLet your boy friend buy a 'Kinnect'! >>Ask your boyfriend to buy you a Kinect.I wanna buy it for you, but I can't do it...because.......:)>>CORRECT (I know why you can't buy it for me, because you're stingy! hahaha. Just joking) As I told you before, you can't play games with this alone. >>CORRECT You should buy a 'Xbox360' either.lol>>You should also buy an Xbox360 with it.So you should tell your boyfriend that "I wanna have Kinnect pakage'!>>So you should tell your boyfriend that you want to have a Kinect package! >>So you should say/tell your boyfriend, I want to have a Kinect package!Good luck!!>>CORRECTWhat would the song I'll sing next time be? >>CORRECT

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