Happy homework^^/

2014-10-13 · 첨삭 강사 Erine

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I think successful person is a man who can move their life to what they dreamed about their life. Money can be used for achieve their dream so easily. But it doesn’t mean that only the wealthy people can achieve their dream. We can find people who aren't wealthy achieved their dream. What about Jose Mujica who is the world’s poorest president? He gives away most of his pay. But it doesn’t matter to his success of the president. So I don’t agree with first statement.

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Hello there, [이름]!^^ Your essay is fascinating! It has a lot of things to impart and I appreciate what you meant. Keep up the good work and if you have questions about your essay, feel free to ask them to me in class. See you then!^^ ~~Teacher Erine~~ I think successful person is a man who can move their life to what they dreamed about their life. >> Correct. Money can be used for achieve their dream so easily. >> Money can be used to achieve their dream so easily. But it doesn’t mean that only the wealthy people can achieve their dream. >> But it doesn\'t mean that only wealthy people can do so. We can find people who aren\'t wealthy achieved their dream. >> We can find people who aren\'t wealthy but able to achieve their dream. What about Jose Mujica who is the world’s poorest president? >> Correct. He gives away most of his pay. >> Correct. But it doesn’t matter to his success of the president. >> But it doesn\'t matter to being a successful president. So I don’t agree with first statement. >> So, I don\'t agree with the first statement.

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