Happy Life

2015-09-25 · 첨삭 강사 Paula

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A man miss not having too musch money when alive and regret that he can not use all money he has when dying. Named Wang in China died at the prime of his life, and his wife who had 30,000,000 US $ married again Wang's driver. He said with joy "I thought that I worked for my boss before, but now I realized that he worked for me." This stunning fact explain that the most important thing in life is not money but health. Nobody knows who will work for whom. We can not use 70% of all function of cellular phone. 70% of the speed is not necessary in the best car. 70% of the area of splendor villa are empty. 70% of the life necessities are not used. Even though how much money he makes, he spend it for another person or another person spend it for himself. In conclusion, simple life is better than complicated, and happiness is the most valuable in life. Life is doing best at every moment, and leave the result to the law of relationships. The best way to live happily is not to stick to.

강사 첨삭

Dear [Name]. [이름],   Advance happy Chuseok or Thanksgiving Day! ^.^   First of all, I would like to say THANK YOU for sharing another life enlightenment story to me. Frankly speaking, I just think about earning and making money nowadays. It is because I want to buy and do a lot of things for my family and myself. I don\'t really care a lot about my health. Sometimes, I forget my happiness. Sometimes, I forget doing things for myself. Fortunately, you are there to open my eyes. You made me realize that happiness is really the most valuable thing in life. THANKS A LOT! ^^   By the way, don\'t forget to see the corrections and suggestions below for your further improvement in writing. In addition, remember the following: 1. Always check subject-verb agreement. 2. Be sure that your sentences are complete. 3. Your words should be in order. 4. Check your spelling.   That\'s all! ^^ Happy reading! ^^, See you very soon! ^^.   ... Teacher Paula ... ^.~     A man miss not having too musch money when alive and regret that he can not use all money he has when dying. >> A man missed not having too much when he was alive and regretted not using all of his money before he died.  Named Wang in China died at the prime of his life, and his wife who had 30,000,000 US $ married again Wang\'s driver. >> A man named Wang in China died at the prime of his life, and he left US$30,000,000 to his wife who married his driver. >> OR: A man named Wang in China died at the prime of his life, and he left US$30,000,000 to his wife who married again, but to their driver. He said with joy \"I thought that I worked for my boss before, but now I realized that he worked for me.\" >> The driver said with joy, \"I thought that I worked for my boss before, but now, I realized that he worked for me.\" This stunning fact explain that the most important thing in life is not money but health. >> This stunning fact explains that the most important thing in life is not money but health. Nobody knows who will work for whom. >> CORRECT! We can not use 70% of all function of cellular phone. >> We can not use all 70% of cellular phone function. 70% of the speed is not necessary in the best car. >> CORRECT! 70% of the area of splendor villa are empty. >> 70% of the area of a splendor villa is empty. 70% of the life necessities are not used. >> CORRECT! Even though how much money he makes, he spend it for another person or another person spend it for himself. >> Even though how much money he makes, he spends it for another person or another person spends it for him. In conclusion, simple life is better than complicated, and happiness is the most valuable in life. >> In conclusion, a simple life is better than a complicated one, and happiness is the most valuable thing in life. >> OR: In conclusion, having a simple life is better than having a complicated one, and happiness is the most valuable thing in life. Life is doing best at every moment, and leave the result to the law of relationships. >> Life is doing your best at every moment and leaving the results to the law of relationships. The best way to live happily is not to stick to. >> The best way to live happily is not to stick to it.

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