Happy weekend
학생이 쓴 원문
For happy weekend, the weather is important. We can go out and play if the weather is good. I usually go Seoul city in weekend and the weather affects my plan very much. I can take a walk, ride a bike and eat snacks in the park, if the weather is good. However, if the weather is bad, I play with my friends in the indoor. Although playing in the indoor is fun, it has many restricts. There are a few of things we can do like playing board games, watching movies, singing in the singing room, talking in the cafe, and so on. It looks like many things after I list those.^^ But I like experiencing new, and the nature infinitely changes showing new landscape . In Korea, there are four seasons and I like the interval moment of changing seasons. The scent of season recalls my memory in that season. In conclusion, I like playing in the outdoor in weekend, and the weather is most important for happy weekend.
강사 첨삭
Hello, [이름]!
Good evening!
Thank you for sharing your thoughts about a happy weekend.
I hope that after this pandemic issue, you\'ll be able to go and enjoy your weekend. ^^
~Teacher Gina
>> For a happy weekend, the weather is important.
We can go out and play if the weather is good.
>> CORRECT.
I usually go Seoul city in weekend and the weather affects my plan very much.
>> I usually go to Seoul City in the weekend and the weather affects my plan very much.
I can take a walk, ride a bike and eat snacks in the park if the weather is good.
>> CORRECT.
However, if the weather is bad, I play with my friends in the indoor.
>> However, if the weather is bad, I play with my friends indoors.
Although playing in the indoor is fun, it has many restricts.
>> Although playing indoors is fun, it has many restrictions.
There are a few of things we can do like playing board games, watching movies, singing in the singing room, talking in the cafe, and so on.
>> CORRECT.
It looks like many things after I list those.^^
>> It looks like there are more things after I listed those.
But I like experiencing new, and the nature infinitely changes showing new landscape .
>> But I like experiencing new things and nature which infinitely change by showing new landscapes.
In Korea, there are four seasons and I like the interval moment of changing seasons.
>> In Korea, there are four seasons and I like the interval moment when the seasons change.
The scent of season recalls my memory in that season.
>> The scent of each season recalls my memory in that season.
In conclusion, I like playing in the outdoor in weekend, and the weather is most important for happy weekend.
>> In conclusion, I like playing outdoors in the weekend and the weather is the most important for a happy weekend.
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