Have computers helped or hurt our lives?

2017-12-26 · 첨삭 강사 Rose

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The development of computers has been developed that is possible to help us and also hurt our lives. As benefits of the computers, it can calculate super-fast compare with human, so it helps human solve complicated formula if people just put it into the computer. Furthermore, we can save time to find information in the library since we do just turn on the computer and search the internet what we want to look for. On the other hand, it made a communication gab as an isolation between human and human. Although people faced each other in front of the table they just use smartphone instead of talking each other. But If I compare it between advantage and disadvantage, I would like to say it has been brought us profits more. Therefore, we can see each other’s face even if we live other countries with the sea between us. And it has made internationalization and helped them to keep in touch with their families whenever they are wherever they want.

강사 첨삭

Thank you for this Jason^^

Belated happy birthday too!

I must say that computer is a phenomenon which is a double-edged sword^^

The development of computers has been developed that is possible to help us and also hurt our lives.
>>The development of computers has been developed that it is possible to help us and also hurt our lives.
As benefits of the computers, it can calculate super-fast compare with human, so it helps human solve complicated formula if people just put it into the computer.

>>As benefits of computers, it can calculate superfast compared with humans, so it helps human solve complicated formula if people just put it into the computer.

Furthermore, we can save time to find information in the library since we do just turn on the computer and search the internet what we want to look for.

>>Furthermore, we can save time looking for information in the library since we do just turn on the computer and search the internet what we want to look for.
On the other hand, it made a communication gab as an isolation between human and human.

>>On the other hand, it made communication gap as an isolation among humans.

Although people faced each other in front of the table they just use smartphone instead of talking each other.
>>Although people faced each other in front of the table they just use smartphone instead of talking to each other.
But If I compare it between advantage and disadvantage, I would like to say it has been brought us profits more.

>>But if I compare advantages and disadvantages, I would like to say it has brought us more profit.
Therefore, we can see each other’s face even if we live other countries with the sea between us.

>> Therefore, we can see each other’s face even if we live in other countries with the sea between us.

And it has made internationalization and helped them to keep in touch with their families whenever they are wherever they want.

>> And it has resulted to internationalization and helped them to keep in touch with their families whenever they are wherever they want.

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