have women to training and I think that if korea\\\'s population decline , women have to go military
학생이 쓴 원문
south korea is country at war during 70 years.
War isn\\\'t finsh, so we protect our country.
south korea was partricarchal from a long time ago. (but be changing more changing now.)
so men was protect his family and country.
men and women is different physical structure and power.
men is strong better than women.
so men go to military (some woman go to military who want it)
I think that women don\\\'t have to go military now but they need to protect them selves.
they have to training and I think that if korea\\\'s population decline , women have to go military.
another way
men and women must protect they country .
pay money or go to military (person who go military receive more a monthly salary.
ex) pay 1.000$ or recive 2.000$ (monthly salary) for 2 years
강사 첨삭
Hi there Ari! Thank you for trying your best to answer your essay! Keep learning new words! Have a nice day.
>>> TEACHER GEMMA
south korea is country at war during 70 years.
>>> South Korea was at war for 70 years.
War isn\\\'t finsh, so we protect our country.
War isn\\\'t finsh, so we protect our country.
>>> The war isn\'t finish, so we have to protect our country.
south korea was partricarchal from a long time ago. (but be changing more changing now.)
south korea was partricarchal from a long time ago. (but be changing more changing now.)
>>> South Korea used to be patriarchal a long time ago. (but it\'s changing now.)
so men was protect his family and country.
so men was protect his family and country.
>>> So fathers should protect his family and country.
men and women is different physical structure and power.
men and women is different physical structure and power.
>>> Men and women are different in physical strength.
men is strong better than women.
men is strong better than women.
>>> Men are stronger than women.
so men go to military (some woman go to military who want it)
so men go to military (some woman go to military who want it)
>>> So men have to go to the military (some women could also join the military if they want.)
I think that women don\\\'t have to go military now but they need to protect them selves.
I think that women don\\\'t have to go military now but they need to protect them selves.
>>> I think women don\'t have to go to the military now but they need to protect themselves.
they have to training and I think that if korea\\\'s population decline , women have to go military.
another way
they have to training and I think that if korea\\\'s population decline , women have to go military.
another way
>>> They have to be trained and I think if Korea\'s population decline, women have to go to the military too.
men and women must protect they country .
men and women must protect they country .
>>> Men and women must protect their country.
pay money or go to military (person who go military receive more a monthly salary.
ex) pay 1.000$ or recive 2.000$ (monthly salary) for 2 years
ex) pay 1.000$ or recive 2.000$ (monthly salary) for 2 years
>>> People who go to the military receive more monthly salary.
ex) pay 1.000$ or receive 2.000$ (monthly salary) for 2 years
ex) pay 1.000$ or receive 2.000$ (monthly salary) for 2 years
>>> CORRECT
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