Have you ever been influenced to do or not do something because of a “flex post” that you’ve seen on

2023-06-21 · 첨삭 강사 Beth

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I only had an Instagram when attending the university and I quit social media from the unnecessary attention. Initially, I started to use Instagram because I wanted to keep my memory of university life in Japan. Since I decided to leave Japan after graduation, I wanted to keep it as a diary that I can reflect on in the future. Therefore, I left the account private and posted a lot of personal pictures of me with friends and family. However, I learned that there are some friends sharing pictures with others and there are many people saw photos. There was nothing sensitive but I felt intimidated. For instance, there was a time when a stranger approached me and asked how I got an internship after seeing the photo of an employee card from my private account. During that time, I learned that most people are generally interested in others’ life and love talking about them.

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Thank you for this Aciel! A stranger approached you and asked about your internship? This is someone you don\'t know and not familiar with? I would feel confused and scared too if I were you.

I only had an Instagram when attending the university and I quit social media from the unnecessary attention. 
>>> correct  
>>> OR: I only had an Instagram account when attending the university and I quit social media due to the unnecessary attention. 
Initially, I started to use Instagram because I wanted to keep my memory of university life in Japan. 
>>> correct   
Since I decided to leave Japan after graduation, I wanted to keep it as a diary that I can reflect on in the future. 
>>>  correct    
Therefore, I left the account private and posted a lot of personal pictures of me with friends and family. 
>>> correct    
However, I learned that there are some friends sharing pictures with others and there are many people saw photos. 
>>However, I learned that there are some friends sharing pictures with others and there were many people who saw photos.
>>> OR: However, I learned that there are some friends who have been sharing pictures with others and many people have seen the photos.      
There was nothing sensitive but I felt intimidated. 
>>> correct   
For instance, there was a time when a stranger approached me and asked how I got an internship after seeing the photo of an employee card from my private account. 
>>>  correct    
During that time, I learned that most people are generally interested in others’ life and love talking about them.
>>>  correct    

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