Have you ever been on a sailboat or a rowboat?

2019-12-11 · 첨삭 강사 Christina

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I have been on a sailboat. When I was 14 I went field trip in school. There I was on a sailboat for leisure. I went fast on the sailboat. So I felt little bit scared. But it made me exicited and cool. At that time something that I have in my head was gone away. That feeling was so great. Now thinking I want to experience it again. Often I feel this feeling when wind is strong. But this is not in ocean or river. I want to feel it in the ocean or river. Only there wind can go through my physical and mental mind. So I like winding weather. I think today I don\'t have any word in my head. So that\'s it. Thank you.

강사 첨삭

Hello Jenna!

Thank you for doing your homework. :)

I understand that English could be really difficult.

But it only takes faith and confidence in yourself to perfect it.

You are a smart person and I know that with constant practice you will do great… ^_^

Xoxo,

T. Christina ^^

Here are my corrections for you:

I have been on a sailboat. 

>> I have been on a sailboat before. 

When I was 14 I went field trip in school. 

>> When I was 14, I went on a school field trip.

There I was on a sailboat for leisure. 

>> I went on a sailboat for leisure.

I went fast on the sailboat. So I felt little bit scared. But it made me exicited and cool. 

>> The sailboat went fast so I felt a little bit scared, but it made me feel excited and cool.

At that time something that I have in my head was gone away. 

>> At that time, something was in my head but I forgot about it.

That feeling was so great. 

>> CORRECT!

Now thinking I want to experience it again. 

>> Now thinking about it, I want to experience it again.

Often I feel this feeling when wind is strong. 

>> I often feel this feeling whenever the wind is blowing strongly.

But this is not in ocean or river. 

>> But the wind is not from the ocean or the river.

I want to feel it in the ocean or river. 

>> I want to feel it by the ocean or river.

Only there wind can go through my physical and mental mind. 

>> Only the wind can go through me physically and through my mental mind.

So I like winding weather. 

>> So I like a windy weather.

I think today I don\'t have any word in my head. 

>> I think I don\'t have any more words to say.

So that\'s it. Thank you.

>> So that\'s all, thank you.

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