Have you ever celebrated a holiday in another country?
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I don\'t have any experience to celebrate a holiday in another country. Because our family had a rule that every family members get together in New Years day and Thanks giving day due to memorial service for ancestors. To prepare the memorial service, we need to buy a lot of foods and cook all day long. It usually takes two days. So, it is impossible to go another country at the past. However, nowadays I can travel at holiday because the rule is broken. But, the flight and hotel cost is too expensive on holidays.
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Hi, Mary! You explained your experience clearly and gave a strong cultural reason, which made your answer interesting and personal. I especially like how you contrasted the past family tradition with the present situation, this shows good organization and logical flow. To improve, focus on using more natural expressions (for example, “experience celebrating” instead of “experience to celebrate”), correcting plural forms (“family members”), and smoothing sentence connections. Overall, your ideas are clear and meaningful, and with a little more attention to grammar and fluency, your writing will become even stronger. Keep up the good work!
-Teacher Wela
I don\'t have any experience to celebrate a holiday in another country.
>> I don’t have any experience celebrating a holiday in another country.
Because our family had a rule that every family members get together in New Years day and Thanks giving day due to memorial service for ancestors.
>> This is because our family had a rule that all family members had to get together on New Year’s Day and Thanksgiving Day for a memorial service for our ancestors.
To prepare the memorial service, we need to buy a lot of foods and cook all day long.
>> To prepare for the memorial service, we needed to buy a lot of food and cook all day long.
It usually takes two days.
>> It usually took two days.
So, it is impossible to go another country at the past.
>> So, it was impossible for us to go to another country in the past.
However, nowadays I can travel at holiday because the rule is broken.
>> However, nowadays I can travel during holidays because the rule has changed.
But, the flight and hotel cost is too expensive on holidays.
>> However, flight and hotel costs are too expensive during holidays.
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