Have you ever donated anything to the poor?-Teacher Vance
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It was when I went to the hospital. That was the first time I saw the sponsorship.
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Today I\'m going to write back to see if I\'ve ever made a donation for the poor.
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Come to think of it, it was the first time I made a donation when I was 10 years old.
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In Korea, there is \"Naver,\" a website that many people like to visit.
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If you visit this official website, you will find a separate window to sponsor.
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I first saw an advertisementat the age of ten to sponsor.
>>I first saw an advertisement the age of ten to sponsor.
Impressed by the mine, I began to contribute steadily with the money I had accumulated, \"Happy Bean\"
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By keeping this donation steady, I was really proud to be able to help these young or hurt friends with this little helping hand.
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Since then, even now, regular donations have been made to war orphans, starving children or refugees.
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I hope not only I but also others will feel the same way and help these friends.
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Then, not only I can be happy, but we can all be happy together.
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