Have you ever done volunteer work? If so, describe the work you did.

2020-06-12 · 첨삭 강사 Dee

학생이 쓴 원문

My friend runs an orphanage. After she first cared for the children at home and built the building, the children gathered a lot. Volunteers are there to help. Sometimes friends gather and go there. What we do there is play together or make food. A friend who returned to Korea while working as a nurse in Germany runs a nursing home. There are many patients with dementia, so the movement is uncomfortable and it is very difficult to take care of them. I draw pictures or become a companion together.

강사 첨삭

Hello Miss. [Name]! I am glad to know about the people that you help. You have a good heart. I hope that you continue helping. Have a good day!~~T.Dee


My friend runs an orphanage.
>>CORRECT!
After she first cared for the children at home and built the building, the children gathered a lot.
>>After she first cared for the children and built the building, the children increased in number.
Volunteers are there to help.
>>CORRECT!
Sometimes friends gather and go there.
>>CORRECT!
What we do there is play together or make food.
>>What we do is we play together or make food.
A friend who returned to Korea while working as a nurse in Germany runs a nursing home.
>>CORRECT!
There are many patients with dementia, so the movement is uncomfortable and it is very difficult to take care of them.
>>There are many patients with dementia.  They always feel uncomfortable and it is very difficult to take care of them.
I draw pictures or become a companion together.
>>I draw pictures for them or I spend time with them.

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