Have you ever experienced discrimination on a personal level?

2016-11-20 · 첨삭 강사 Nina

학생이 쓴 원문

When I served in the military, I worked with American soldiers. I don’t remember exactly what happened. However, one of the American soldiers cursed at me one day like “shit Asian” when I was tying my shoes at the hallway of barracks. I think I didn’t do anything that provoked him to say it to me. I felt absurd and was perplexed. Another time when I felt discriminated was when I traveled to Latin American countries on business. My flight had to be transferred in Vancouver in the States. I didn’t have a US visa at that time. During the transit in Vancouver, I was escorted by a US Immigration security official/guard right after getting out of the flight. At the transit lounge, the guard stood close to me and watched even every second. When I went to the restroom, he even followed me and didn’t leave me alone. I was so embarrassed and got upset, although I couldn’t resist. I felt like I was treated as a criminal. Not many countries are adopting such polices for transit customers.

강사 첨삭

Hello there Sir [이름].

A great day to you. ^^

Thank you for sharing your experiences with me.

I felt bad after reading about what happened at transit lounge.

I admire you for being so strong.

I hope that you are having a great time.

See you in class.

Teacher Nina


When I served in the military, I worked with American soldiers.

>> correct

I don’t remember exactly what happened.

>> correct

However, one of the American soldiers cursed at me one day like “shit Asian” when I was tying my shoes at the hallway of barracks.

>> However, one of the American soldiers cursed me one day like “shit Asian” when I was tying my shoes at the hallway of the barracks.

I think I didn’t do anything that provoked him to say it to me.

>> correct

I felt absurd and was perplexed.

>> correct

Another time when I felt discriminated was when I traveled to Latin American countries on business.

>> correct

My flight had to be transferred in Vancouver in the States.

>> correct

I didn’t have a US visa at that time.

>> correct

During the transit in Vancouver, I was escorted by a US Immigration security official/guard right after getting out of the flight.

>> correct

At the transit lounge, the guard stood close to me and watched even every second.

>> correct

When I went to the restroom, he even followed me and didn’t leave me alone.

>> correct

I was so embarrassed and got upset, although I couldn’t resist.

>> correct

I felt like I was treated as a criminal.

>> correct

Not many countries are adopting such polices for transit customers.

>> correct

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