Have you ever experienced discrimination? Why do people discriminate?

2020-02-13 · 첨삭 강사 Avery

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I think the book is good and easy to me. But, I do not have a lot interest about my birthplace and The content we had last class is not interesting to me. So, I hope it finished as soon as possible.T-T There are a various of discrimination like racial discrimination. I\'ve never been experienced discirimination. Although I had been experienced it, probably I would not perceive it... I think the reason why people do discriminate is because they are ignorant. Discrimination is occurred because they have a just small world. I think they should experience a lot, take a different kinds of world and extend their own view. And I want to ask you to modify my e-mail to coordinator who work at the college I will go to. I hope ask them whether I can select the class for senior. -I found that your faculty provides the two module for exchange student. Maybe most students will select level2 but, I want to select level3 to study more deep. Is there any qualification to choose it?

강사 첨삭

Hi, [이름]! Thanks for accomplishing your homework. We can definitely move on to the next topic if you find the lesson uninteresting. Don\'t hesitate to tell me. ^^

Enjoy your Thursday morning. See you later! ^^

~T.Avery

I think the book is good and easy to me. But, I do not have a lot interest about my birthplace and The content we had last class is not interesting to me. So, I hope it finished as soon as possible.T-T

>> I think the book is good and easy for me but I do not have a lot of interest about my birthplace and the content we had last class is not interesting to me so I hope it will be finished as soon as possible.T-T
There are a various of discrimination like racial discrimination.

>> There are various forms of discrimination like racial discrimination.

I\'ve never been experienced discirimination.

>> I\'ve never experienced discrimination.

Although I had been experienced it, probably I would not perceive it...

>> Although I had experienced it, probably I would not perceive it.

I think the reason why people do discriminate is because they are ignorant.

>> I think the reason why people discriminate is because they are ignorant.

Discrimination is occurred because they have a just small world.

>> Discrimination occurs because they have just a small world.

I think they should experience a lot, take a different kinds of world and extend their own view.

>> I think they should experience a lot, travel the world, and extend their own view.
And I want to ask you to modify my e-mail to coordinator who work at the college I will go to. I hope ask them whether I can select the class for senior.

>> Also, I want to ask you to modify my e-mail to the coordinator who work at the college I will go to. I hope to ask them whether I can select the class for seniors.

Here is the modification of the e-mail ^^:
-I found that your faculty provides the two module for exchange student.

>> I found that your faculty provides two modules for the exchange student program.

Maybe most students will select level2 but, I want to select level3 to study more deep.

>> Most students may select level 2, however, I would like to take up level 3 in order to have a more in depth study.

Is there any qualification to choose it?

>> Are there any requirements or qualifications to be able to choose my preferred module?

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