Have you ever experienced discrimination? Why do people discriminate?
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Discrimination is an international problem.
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In addition, many people are suffer from because of this.
>> In addition, many people suffer because of this.
Then, why do people discriminate other people?
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Some people discriminate the other people because of their unique appearance.
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In school, some students are bullied because they are foreginer.
>>In school, some students are bullied because they are foreigners.
Sometimes, in western countries, Asian people experience discrimination because there are some differences in western and eastern people\'s appearance.
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It\'s common to feel differences when you face a foreigner.
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However, it\'s a wrong behavior to reveal your thoughts in your acts.
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I have experienced discrimination.
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When I traveled to Australia, many people said me and my family, \"Ni hao\", though we aren\'t Chineses.
>> When I traveled to Australia, many people greeted me and my family, \"Ni hao\", though we aren\'t Chinese.
Australians can think it is a kind behavior.
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However, in foreginer\'s position, it\'s such a rude behavior to define all Asians to Chineses.
>> However, in A foreigner\'s position, it\'s such a rude behavior to define all Asians as Chinese.
Because I\'ve experienced the discrimination, I know how it makes people annoyed.
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I\'ll treat all people equally!! .
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