Have you ever experienced discrimination? Why do people discriminate?

2020-02-13 · 첨삭 강사 Avery

학생이 쓴 원문

Discrimination is an international problem. In addition, many people are suffer from because of this. Then, why do people discriminate other people? Some people discriminate the other people because of their unique appearance. In school, some students are bullied because they are foreginer. Sometimes, in western countries, Asian people experience discrimination because there are some differences in western and eastern people\'s appearance. It\'s common to feel differences when you face a foreginer. However, it\'s a wrong behavior to reveal your thoughts in your acts. I have experienced discrimination. When I traveled to Australia, many people said me and my family, \"Ni hao\", though we aren\'t Chineses. Australians can think it is a kind behavior. However, in foreginer\'s position, it\'s such a rude behavior to define all Asians to Chineses. Because I\'ve experienced the discrimination, I know how it makes people annoyed. I\'ll treat all people equally!!

강사 첨삭

Happy Thursday, [이름], the pretty girl from South Korea! Thank you so much for finishing your homework, though I know you still have a lot to do.

You only got a few errors. Great job! ^^ I\'d love to hear this story again in class. I\'ll see you later! ^^

~T.Avery

Discrimination is an international problem.

>> CORRECT

In addition, many people are suffer from because of this.

>> In addition, many people suffer because of this.

Then, why do people discriminate other people?

>> CORRECT
Some people discriminate the other people because of their unique appearance.

>> CORRECT

In school, some students are bullied because they are foreginer.

>>In school, some students are bullied because they are foreigners.

Sometimes, in western countries, Asian people experience discrimination because there are some differences in western and eastern people\'s appearance.

>> CORRECT

It\'s common to feel differences when you face a foreigner.

>> CORRECT

However, it\'s a wrong behavior to reveal your thoughts in your acts.

>> CORRECT
I have experienced discrimination.

>> CORRECT

When I traveled to Australia, many people said me and my family, \"Ni hao\", though we aren\'t Chineses.

>> When I traveled to Australia, many people greeted me and my family, \"Ni hao\", though we aren\'t Chinese.

Australians can think it is a kind behavior.

>> CORRECT

However, in foreginer\'s position, it\'s such a rude behavior to define all Asians to Chineses.

>> However, in A foreigner\'s position, it\'s such a rude behavior to define all Asians as Chinese.

Because I\'ve experienced the discrimination, I know how it makes people annoyed.

>> CORRECT

I\'ll treat all people equally!! .

>> CORRECT

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