Have you ever felt that painting takes too much time and effort?
학생이 쓴 원문
It takes a lot of time and effort for all art, whether it\'s music or art.
As I said yesterday, I woke up early due to insomnia last year, so I needed activities to do at dawn.
In fact, art was a good choice because sound does not harm others like music.
The work of drawing has been interesting for several months and all the members who worked with me have worked hard.
But as time passed, the members disappeared one by one, and I ended up alone.
At first, I could see my growth clearly through the picture.
After 6 months or so, I was continuing to paint a similar level.
I felt that raising my level one step required too much time and effort.
I thought that the reason why the members gave up art one by one was because of the same thoughts as me.
강사 첨삭
Hi David, your writing beautifully captures the struggle of learning and the emotions that come with it. Additionally, your response was well-structured and conveyed a clear reflection on your artistic journey. Your ideas were easy to follow, but there were a few grammar adjustments needed for smoother readability. Pay close attention to word choices and sentence flow, especially when comparing concepts. I added more details to expand on your thoughts and included encouragement to remind you that hitting a plateau doesn’t mean stopping. It means you’re on the verge of a breakthrough. Great effort! Keep going, and remember that every great artist has felt this way at some point.
~ T. Lia
It takes a lot of time and effort for all art, whether it\'s music or art.
>> It takes a lot of time and effort for all forms of art, whether it\'s music or visual art.
As I said yesterday, I woke up early due to insomnia last year, so I needed activities to do at dawn.
>> As I said yesterday, I used to wake up early due to insomnia last year, so I needed activities to do at dawn.
In fact, art was a good choice because sound does not harm others like music.
>> In fact, art was a good choice because, unlike music, it does not produce sound that could disturb others.
The work of drawing has been interesting for several months and all the members who worked with me have worked hard.
>> Drawing has been interesting for several months, and all the members who worked with me put in a lot of effort.
But as time passed, the members disappeared one by one, and I ended up alone.
>> However, as time passed, the members left one by one, and I ended up alone.
At first, I could see my growth clearly through the picture.
>> At first, I could see my progress clearly through my drawings.
After 6 months or so, I was continuing to paint a similar level.
>> After about six months, I found myself painting at a similar level.
I felt that raising my level one step required too much time and effort.
>> CORRECT
I thought that the reason why the members gave up art one by one was because of the same thoughts as me.
>> I thought the reason the members gave up art one by one was that they had the same thoughts as I did.
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