Have you ever felt you were under a lot of stress? What did you do to overcome it?
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People in the modern society cannot avoid getting stressed out. We are often stressed at work and at home as well. We feel under the pressure when we do business or live our personal life. Things might go well as we think and it irritates us. Among various factors that cause stress, the key contributor is conflicts with other people. You might lose your job, go bankrupt, or get sick. You can manage to handle them. They are often under your control. However, if you have a problem with your family, friends, business partners, co-workers or boss, it is really hard for you to overcome it by yourself because you can hardly change other people’s mind or behavior. There are lots of ways you can overcome stress. Which way is effective and preferred could vary person by person. I personally like to play sports games in order to relieve stress. When I engage in playing games, I can forget about the things that bother me. However, when the problem is severe, I cannot find any good ways.
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Yahoo! One more day to go Sir [이름]. ^^ We are going to take a rest again.
It won\'t only be for two days but for three days. Yipee!
There are a lot of bad effects of stress. ^^
We need to overcome it. We should surround ourselves with good things.
We have to be always a positive thinker.
Thanks for your wonderful composition.
See you in class.
Teacher Nina
People in the modern society cannot avoid getting stressed out.
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We are often stressed at work and at home as well.
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We feel under the pressure when we do business or live our personal life.
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Things might go well as we think and it irritates us.
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Among various factors that cause stress, the key contributor is conflicts with other people.
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You might lose your job, go bankrupt, or get sick.
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You can manage to handle them.
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They are often under your control.
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However, if you have a problem with your family, friends, business partners, co-workers or boss, it is really hard for you to overcome it by yourself because you can hardly change other people’s mind or behavior.
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There are lots of ways you can overcome stress.
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Which way is effective and preferred could vary person by person.
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I personally like to play sports games in order to relieve stress.
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When I engage in playing games, I can forget about the things that bother me.
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However, when the problem is severe, I cannot find any good ways.
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