Have you ever had a surgery? Would you allow your surgery to be live streamed on Facebook?
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I haven\'t had a surgery but I don\'t allow my surgery to be live streamed on Facebook.
Because it is my privacy. I don\'t want to reveal my privacy.
Also, some people think the surgery is very gross, so they don\'t want to watch the surgery.
But, if they don\'t want, they can watch the surgery because Facebook is open place.
Thus, we protect their right not to watch the surgery, I don\'t allow my surgery to be live streamed on Facebook.
However, I agree to install CCTV on operating room.
Currently, most doctors don\'t agree this opinion because it is harmful medical action. If a CCTV is installed on operating room, they are passive about medical action.
But, many problem like sexual harassment, medical accident is occurred on operating room constantly. For solving this problem, we have to install CCTV on operating room.
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Hello Se [이름]!
Here are the corrections.
I haven\'t had a surgery but I don\'t allow my surgery to be live streamed on Facebook.
>>I haven\'t had a surgery, but I don\'t allow my surgery to be live streamed on Facebook.
Because it is my privacy. I don\'t want to reveal my privacy.
>>Correct!
Also, some people think the surgery is very gross, so they don\'t want to watch the surgery.
>>Correct!
But, if they don\'t want, they can watch the surgery because Facebook is open place.
>>But, if they don\'t want, they can watch the surgery because Facebook is an open place.
Thus, we protect their right not to watch the surgery, I don\'t allow my surgery to be live streamed on Facebook.
>>Correct!
However, I agree to install CCTV on operating room. Currently, most doctors don\'t agree this opinion because it is harmful medical action.
>>However, I agree to install CCTV on operating room. Currently, most doctors don\'t agree with this opinion because it is a harmful medical action.
If a CCTV is installed on operating room, they are passive about medical action.
>>If a CCTV is installed in the operating room, they are passive about medical action.
But, many problem like sexual harassment, medical accident is occurred on operating room constantly. For solving this problem, we have to install CCTV on operating room.
>>But, many problems like sexual harassment and medical accident occurred in operating rooms constantly. For solving this problem, we have to install CCTV in operating rooms.
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