Have you ever had any memorable swimming experiences or adventures?

2023-09-16 · 첨삭 강사 Jade

학생이 쓴 원문

When I was an elementary school student, I had an experience of learning swimming. I learned it for almost above a year, but I never started on the starting block like swimmers. Because I was young and small. After I satrted learning swimming again, I started to start off on the starting block for the first time this week. I was very nervous, but doing it once or twice, I got used to it. When I started, I felt thrilled as if it\'s done like a swimmer who participated in the Olympics. Naturally, I decided to try free diving. After I arrive at the pool early and sometimes pratice free diving. From next week, I will have plipper classes every Wednesday and Thursday. It will be another challenge and an interesting experience. I don\'t know if I can do well of not, but I\'ll enjoy, challenge and do my best as I\'ve always done.

강사 첨삭

Hi, [이름]! You journey of learning how to swim sounds exciting and thrilling indeed. I\'m also excited for you to learn freediving. Tell me more about it when you start already. Have a great time with your family this weekend. See you in class, and thanks for this! <3
~T. Jade^^
Homework: Have you ever had any memorable swimming experiences or adventures?
When I was an elementary school student, I had an experience of learning swimming.
>> Correct
I learned it for almost above a year, but I never started on the starting block like swimmers. Because I was young and small.
>> I learned it for almost a year, but I never started on the starting block like swimmers because I was young and small.
After I satrted learning swimming again, I started to start off on the starting block for the first time this week.
>> After I started learning swimming again, I started to begin from the starting block for the first time this week.
I was very nervous, but doing it once or twice, I got used to it.
>> Correct
When I started, I felt thrilled as if it\'s done like a swimmer who participated in the Olympics.
>> When I started, I felt thrilled, as if I had achieved something like a swimmer who participated in the Olympics.
Naturally, I decided to try free diving. 
>> Correct
After I arrive at the pool early and sometimes pratice free diving.
>> After I arrive at the pool early and sometimes practice free diving.
From next week, I will have plipper classes every Wednesday and Thursday.
>> From next week, I will have swimming classes every Wednesday and Thursday.
It will be another challenge and an interesting experience.
>> Correct
I don\'t know if I can do well of not, but I\'ll enjoy, challenge and do my best as I\'ve always done.
>> I don\'t know if I can do well or not, but I\'ll enjoy the challenge and do my best, as I\'ve always done.

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