Have you ever had to change the way you speak, or the way you act? Why?

2014-08-08 · 첨삭 강사 Nina

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I have always wanted to change the way I speak and the way I act. I do not like the way I speak and act now. I want to be an eloquent speaker. I want to be more spontaneous, but not lose a logical sense, when debating. My voice should be deep and trustworthy. I want to act more discreetly. I should be more generous and embraceable. I often lose my temper. I get emotional too easily. It is really difficult for me to change the way I speak and act. I often regret what I speak and the way I act. I even dreamed of the scene that I was harshly criticized by others for the way I acted. Look at our situation, our world and the people in it from a different angle. We will see it differently and think differently about it. By changing the way we speak and the way we act, we can change our life. We can change whole things. Our life is what it is because of the way we think, speak and act. With having this opportunity, I make a resolution again that I should think twice before speaking or acting.

강사 첨삭

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I have always wanted to change the way I speak and the way I act. 
>> Correct
>> OR: I have always wanted to change the way I speak and act. 
I do not like the way I speak and act now. 
>> Correct
I want to be an eloquent speaker. 
>> Correct
I want to be more spontaneous, but not lose a logical sense, when debating.
>> Correct
My voice should be deep and trustworthy. 
>> Correct
I want to act more discreetly. 
>> Correct
I should be more generous and embraceable. 
>> Correct
I often lose my temper. 
>> Correct
I get emotional too easily. 
>> Correct
It is really difficult for me to change the way I speak and act. 
>> Correct
I often regret what I speak and the way I act. 
>> Correct
I even dreamed of the scene that I was harshly criticized by others for the way I acted. 
>> Correct
Look at our situation, our world and the people in it from a different angle. 
>> Correct
We will see it differently and think differently about it. 
>> We will see and think about it differently.
By changing the way we speak and the way we act, we can change our life. 
>> Correct
We can change whole things. 
>> Correct
>> OR: We ca change a lot of things. 
Our life is what it is because of the way we think, speak and act. 
>> Correct
With having this opportunity, I make a resolution again that I should think twice before speaking or acting.
>> Correct

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