Have you ever known someone with an addiction? What type of addiction? Can you suggest ways on how t
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I'm not sure it is an addiction but I think that using SNS through the smart phone is kind of an addiction. In my case, I have a friend of mine who has really a blind faith on SNS even if she had in a trouble.
That time, she was exhausted her mind but on her SNS, she has updated her new photo. I couldn't believe what was she doing. She told me she got in trouble. I think that it happen very easily by your side as well.
So if you really want to avoid that situation, I would like to recommend to you take a walk and do the exercise for your health and mind. It's a very simple sugesstion but not many of people do that. So take deep breath and listen to what your body says. I convince that you will solved something you've got problems. I hope you do that at least once a week with out your SNS.
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Hello Mini! Thank you for answering the homework I gave you in the class. I appreciate your effort to speak and express your thoughts about this issue.
~T. IRENE~
not sure it is an addiction but I think that using SNS through the smart phone is kind of an addiction.
>>> I\'m not sure it is an addiction but I think that using SNS through the smart phone is kind of an addiction.
In my case, I have a friend of mine who has really a blind faith on SNS even if she had in a trouble.
>>> In my case, there is a friend of mine who has a really blind faith on SNS even if she\'s heading into trouble.
>>> In my case, I have a friend who has a really blind faith on SNS even if she\'s heading into trouble.
That time, she was exhausted her mind but on her SNS, she has updated her new photo.
>>> At that time, she was alreayd exhausted but she still had the time and energy to upload her new photo.
I couldn\'t believe what was she doing.
>>> I couldn\'t believe what she was doing.
She told me she got in trouble.
>> Then she told me that she got into trouble.
I think that it happen very easily by your side as well.
>>> I think that was expected.
So if you really want to avoid that situation, I would like to recommend to you take a walk and do the exercise for your health and mind.
>>> So if you really want to avoid a similar situation, I would recommend for you to take a walk and/or do an exercise to relax the mind and body.
It\'s a very simple sugesstion but not many of people do that.
>>> It\'s a very simple sugesstion but not many people do that.
So take deep breath and listen to what your body says.
>>> So take a deep breath and listen to what your body says.
I convince that you will solved something you\'ve got problems.
>>> I am convinced that you can easily overcome problems.
I hope you do that at least once a week with out your SNS.
>>> I hope that you do this at least once a week without taking on SNS.
~T. IRENE~
not sure it is an addiction but I think that using SNS through the smart phone is kind of an addiction.
>>> I\'m not sure it is an addiction but I think that using SNS through the smart phone is kind of an addiction.
In my case, I have a friend of mine who has really a blind faith on SNS even if she had in a trouble.
>>> In my case, there is a friend of mine who has a really blind faith on SNS even if she\'s heading into trouble.
>>> In my case, I have a friend who has a really blind faith on SNS even if she\'s heading into trouble.
That time, she was exhausted her mind but on her SNS, she has updated her new photo.
>>> At that time, she was alreayd exhausted but she still had the time and energy to upload her new photo.
I couldn\'t believe what was she doing.
>>> I couldn\'t believe what she was doing.
She told me she got in trouble.
>> Then she told me that she got into trouble.
I think that it happen very easily by your side as well.
>>> I think that was expected.
So if you really want to avoid that situation, I would like to recommend to you take a walk and do the exercise for your health and mind.
>>> So if you really want to avoid a similar situation, I would recommend for you to take a walk and/or do an exercise to relax the mind and body.
It\'s a very simple sugesstion but not many of people do that.
>>> It\'s a very simple sugesstion but not many people do that.
So take deep breath and listen to what your body says.
>>> So take a deep breath and listen to what your body says.
I convince that you will solved something you\'ve got problems.
>>> I am convinced that you can easily overcome problems.
I hope you do that at least once a week with out your SNS.
>>> I hope that you do this at least once a week without taking on SNS.
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