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2014-11-22 · 첨삭 강사 Nina

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I have some digestion programs.This problem seems running in my family.I started experiencing the problem since my high school days. When I eat a little bit more than I used to eat, I suffer from indigestion.My stomach and intestine don’t seem to work well. Moreover, I do not digest well wheat based or fried food, although I am fine with food that is made from rice. So, I always have to be careful when I eat food. I’m also suffering from a back pain due to lumbar disk disease so that I should not run for a long time. I should be careful about lifting a heavy stuff.I am not in good health. Whenever I have an annual medical check-up, my problem is getting increased compared with the previous year. This year’s check-up shows that I have anemia, low blood pressure, problems with liver, cystoma in prostate, etc. As I get older, I begin to get more problems. Isn’t it unavoidable? My knee joints began making a problem. When I walk, I feel pain.It's sad that I'm approaching the end.

강사 첨삭

Happy Saturday Sir [이름]!
I am also having some health problems nowadays.
I think it is because of my lifestyle.
Oh! You are still strong.
I know that you are so conscious with your health.
Just always follow the doctor\'s order. 
Be positive. You will live longer. 
Have a great day. ^^ 
Teacher Nina

I have some digestion programs.
>> I have some digestion problems.
This problem seems running in my family.
>> correct
>> OR: This problem runs within my family. 
I started experiencing the problem since my high school days. 
>> correct
>> OR: I started experiencing it since I was in high school. 
When I eat a little bit more than I used to eat, I suffer from indigestion.
>> correct
>> OR: When I consume food more than I used to eat, I suffer from indigestion. 
My stomach and intestine don’t seem to work well. 
>> I think my stomach and intestines are not working well. 
Moreover, I do not digest well wheat based or fried food, although I am fine with food that is made from rice. 
>> correct
So, I always have to be careful when I eat food. 
>> correct
I’m also suffering from a back pain due to lumbar disk disease so that I should not run for a long time. 
>> I am also suffering from back pains due to lumbar disc disease. I should not run for a long time. 
I should be careful about lifting a heavy stuff.
>> I should be careful when lifting heavy stuffs. 
I am not in good health. 
>> correct
>> OR: My health is not in good condition. 
Whenever I have an annual medical check-up, my problem is getting increased compared with the previous year. 
>> Whenever I have an annual medical check-up, my problem is becoming worse compared to the previous year. 
This year’s check-up shows that I have anemia, low blood pressure, problems with liver, cystoma in prostate, etc. 
>> This year\'s check up showed that I have anemia, low blood pressure, liver problems. cystoma of prostate, etc. 
As I get older, I begin to get more problems. 
>> correct
>> OR: As I get older, I begin to experience more problems. 
Isn’t it unavoidable? 
>> correct
>> OR: Can\'t I avoid it?
My knee joints began making a problem. 
>> My knee joints are also having some problems.
>> OR: I am experiencing problems with my knee joints. 
When I walk, I feel pain.
>> correct
It\'s sad that I\'m approaching the end.
>> correct

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