Have you ever thought of entering the medical industry?
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Once, I considered a career path in the medical industry. The reason was like the ones mentioned in the article. Until last year, I found it challenging to accomplish my career goal. Therefore, I thought it would be better to enter the medical industry, which is stable and high-paid. Compared to the past, doctors, pharmacists, and nurses do not have high-paying jobs. Most of those fields were guaranteed high salaries after graduation. However, now a rising number of graduates must compete for jobs. Many medical students went through the application and several interviews to get a job in a prestige university hospital. If it is for the opening of their hospital, many need to compete with other self-employed workers. There are five dentists nearby my apartment. Also, there are some imbalances of income for doctors based on specialty. Decreased level of birth rates led maternity units to be the least popular. Such inequality has led graduates to choose a similar career path.
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Thank you for this once again Aciel!
Once, I considered a career path in the medical industry.
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>>> OR: I once considered a career path in the medical industry.
The reason was like the ones mentioned in the article.
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Until last year, I found it challenging to accomplish my career goal.
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Therefore, I thought it would be better to enter the medical industry, which is stable and high-paid.
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Compared to the past, doctors, pharmacists, and nurses do not have high-paying jobs.
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Most of those fields were guaranteed high salaries after graduation.
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However, now a rising number of graduates must compete for jobs.
>>> correct
Many medical students went through the application and several interviews to get a job in a prestige university hospital.
>>> correct
If it is for the opening of their hospital, many need to compete with other self-employed workers.
>>> correct
There are five dentists nearby my apartment.
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>>> OR: There are five dentists near my apartment.
>>> OR: From my apartment, there are five dental clinics nearby.
Also, there are some imbalances of income for doctors based on specialty.
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Decreased level of birth rates led maternity units to be the least popular.
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Such inequality has led graduates to choose a similar career path.
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