Have you ever thought of fighting crime by becoming a police officer?

2020-03-10 · 첨삭 강사 Dee

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Of course it is a great job because they make our society much better to live! But honestly, I don\'t have any interest to be a police officer. I think police officer must have good fitness and high social responsibility but I am a bit introverted person so it\'s not for me. However, people around me who want to work at police station always say they hope to become a help to public. So, whenever I hear it, I feel respectful to them.

강사 첨삭

Hello [이름] Ha! Thank you for sending your composition. I have the same thoughts as you. I think that being a public servant is not for everyone but we could somehow contribute to make safer community.~~T.Dee

Of course it is a great job because they make our society much better to live! 
>>Of course, it is a great job because they make our society much better to live in! 
But honestly, I don\'t have any interest to be a police officer.
>>CORRECT!
I think police officer must have good fitness and high social responsibility but I am a bit introverted person so it\'s not for me. 
>>I think a police officer must have good fitness and high social awareness because of their responsibility but I am a bit introverted person so it\'s not for me.
However, people around me who want to work at police station always say they hope to become a help to public.
>>However, people around me who want to work at police station always say they hope to become help the public.
So, whenever I hear it, I feel respectful to them. 
>>CORRECT! 

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