Have you ever volunteered to help victims of natural disasters? Why?
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I helped young babies at Tajikistan by knitting a hat for them.
>> I helped young babies in Tajikistan by knitting hats for them.
newborn babies often dies because of hypothermia.
>> Newborn babies often die because of hypothermia.
their body temperature can be increased by wearing hats.
>> Their body temperature can be increased by wearing hats.
i participated at this activity too.
>> I participated at that activity, too.
it\'s campaign from \'save the children\'.
>> It\'s a campaign from \'Save the Children\'.
there is repairing hats, checking them, and making blanket for other volunteer works.
>> You can repair hats, check them and make blankets for some of the volunteers.
i participated because it was a homework from my school, but i think it was really valuable thing to do.
>> I participated because it was a homework from my school but I think it was really a valuable thing to do.
i would like to volunteer at other campaigns or activities of helping victims of natural disasters too.
>> I would like to volunteer on other campaigns, activities or helping victims of natural disasters, too.
i think trying to help victims of disaster is important because small move of each individuals can give a big impact of saving lots of people\'s life.
>> I think trying to help victims of disasters is important because doing a small thing can give a big impact in saving lots of people\'s lives.
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