Have you ever volunteered to help victims of natural disasters? Why?

2019-02-12 · 첨삭 강사 Rosie

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I helped young babies at Tajikistan by knitting a hat for them. newborn babies often dies because of hypothermia. their body temperature can be increased by wearing hats. i participated at this activity too. it\'s campaign from \'save the children\'. there is repairing hats, checking them, and making blanket for other volunteer works. i participated because it was a homework from my school, but i think it was really valuable thing to do. i would like to volunteer at other campaigns or activities of helping victims of natural disasters too. i think trying to help victims of disaster is important because small move of each individuals can give a big impact of saving lots of people\'s life.

강사 첨삭

Hello, Sua!

Thank you so much for doing your homework ^^

Have a wonderful day ☺♥


I helped young babies at Tajikistan by knitting a hat for them.

>> I helped young babies in Tajikistan by knitting hats for them.


newborn babies often dies because of hypothermia.

>> Newborn babies often die because of hypothermia.


their body temperature can be increased by wearing hats.

>> Their body temperature can be increased by wearing hats.


i participated at this activity too.

>> I participated at that activity, too.


it\'s campaign from \'save the children\'.

>> It\'s a campaign from \'Save the Children\'.


there is repairing hats, checking them, and making blanket for other volunteer works.

>> You can repair hats, check them and make blankets for some of the volunteers.


i participated because it was a homework from my school, but i think it was really valuable thing to do.

>> I participated because it was a homework from my school but I think it was really a valuable thing to do.


i would like to volunteer at other campaigns or activities of helping victims of natural disasters too.

>> I would like to volunteer on other campaigns, activities or helping victims of natural disasters, too.


i think trying to help victims of disaster is important because small move of each individuals can give a big impact of saving lots of people\'s life.

>> I think trying to help victims of disasters is important because doing a small thing can give a big impact in saving lots of people\'s lives.

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