Have you ever worked for a company that has implemented any innovative ideas?
학생이 쓴 원문
I used to work for a construction company that planned and constructed the apartment with an ergonomic design which was an innovative design then. We tried to provide houses with more comfortable and human-friendly ideas. Our company fell behind in construction experience in spite of super sound finance because our company belatedly entered the construction industry as a subsidiary of a conglomerate in Korea. We had a passion to be the first in the Korean construction industry so that we needed something innovative to tell us from other competitors or make us noteworthy, which made us focus on innovative design for houses that other companies had never considered yet.
강사 첨삭
Good evening, Steve!
I appreciate the time you took to accomplish this homework. Thank you for answering the question in a detailed and coherent manner.
You are great at making sentences and explaining the past of your previous workplace. I hope you find the minor corrections below helpful in your writing.
Until our next class!
~ Teacher Gela
I used to work for a construction company that planned and constructed the apartment with an ergonomic design which was an innovative design then.
>> I used to work for a construction company that planned and constructed an apartment with an ergonomic design which was innovative then.
We tried to provide houses with more comfortable and human-friendly ideas.
>> CORRECT
Our company fell behind in construction experience in spite of super sound finance because our company belatedly entered the construction industry as a subsidiary of a conglomerate in Korea.
>> Our company fell behind in construction experience despite super-sound finances because it belatedly entered the construction industry as a subsidiary of a conglomerate in Korea.
We had a passion to be the first in the Korean construction industry so that we needed something innovative to tell us from other competitors or make us noteworthy, which made us focus on innovative design for houses that other companies had never considered yet.
>> We were passionate about becoming the first in the Korean construction industry, so we needed something innovative to tell us from other competitors or make us noteworthy, which made us focus on innovative designs for houses that other companies had never considered.
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