Have you heard of stories where people beg for money but in fact they are rich? Share it in writing.

2014-05-23 · 첨삭 강사 Nina

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There was sensational news a few years ago in Seoul, Korea. There was a guy who was living on the street. For a certain reason, he was stopped and inspected by a policeman. The police checked the small back bag that he was carrying and found out that there was more than thousand dollars in it. The police questioned him, suspecting that he might have thieved or robbed the money. He insisted on his innocent, saying it was his money. He added he had more than million dollars in his bank account. Police inspected his account and it turned out that what he said was true. He inherited a fortune from his parents. Being asked why he was living on the street, he said he felt free to live that way. He added he could not sleep in the house or a hotel because he felt bound. This is a rare case. There might be some beggars who are actually rich. Do you want to try? However, begging itself could be a tough job. There is no an easy job to make money in the world.

강사 첨삭

A terrific Friday to you Sir [이름]!

It\'s the end of the line again.

Finally, you can take a rest! Yipee!

I know that you are really waiting for the weekend.
You deserve to treat yourself.


Anyway, thank you for sending this in.

You are doing a marvelous job these days.

I can say that your writing skill improved.

Just be consistent with your verb tenses when you compose your sentence.

I know you can do it. I don\'t want to try it, it will be more difficult to beg for some money than working in the office. Hihihihi!

I\'d better work until I die. Hihihi!  See you in class.
Teacher Nina

 

There was sensational news a few years ago in Seoul, Korea.

>> There was a sensational news a few years ago in Seoul, Korea.

There was a guy who was living on the street.

>> Correct!

For a certain reason, he was stopped and inspected by a policeman.

>> Correct!

The police checked the small back bag that he was carrying and found out that there was more than thousand dollars in it.

>> Correct!

>> OR: The police checked the small backpack that he has and found out that there was more than a thousand dollars in it.

The police questioned him, suspecting that he might have thieved or robbed the money.

>> Correct!

He insisted on his innocent, saying it was his money.

>> He insisted on his innocence, saying it was his money.

He added he had more than million dollars in his bank account.

>> Correct!

Police inspected his account and it turned out that what he said was true.

>> Correct!

>> OR: The police inspected his account and it turned out that it was true.

He inherited a fortune from his parents.

>> Correct!

Being asked why he was living on the street, he said he felt free to live that way.

>> Correct!

>> Better: Being asked why he was living on the street, he said that he felt free to live that way.

He added he could not sleep in the house or a hotel because he felt bound.

>> He added that he could not sleep in the house or a hotel because he felt bound.

This is a rare case.

>> Correct!

There might be some beggars who are actually rich.

>> Correct!

Do you want to try?

>> Correct!

However, begging itself could be a tough job.

>> Correct!

There is no an easy job to make money in the world.

>> There is no easy way to make money in the world.

>> OR: There is no easy job to make money in the world.

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