Have you heard of voice phishing? What can you say about it?
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Thank you for sharing your answer with me. Your essay is good with minor corrections, and it was well-thought-out. But seriously, this crime is really becoming a big problem. Criminals involved are getting more advanced. I hope that they will be caught soon so this will be stopped completely. ~
Thank you for sharing your answer with me. Your essay is good with minor corrections, and it was well-thought-out. But seriously, this crime is really becoming a big problem. Criminals involved are getting more advanced. I hope that they will be caught soon so this will be stopped completely. ~
~ Teacher Gina
Oh, I\'ve heard of voice phishing and I\'ve heard a lot about it.
>> CORRECT.
>> Or: I’m familiar with voice phishing.
At first, I thought it was just a new type of crime, mainly because there are a lot of elderly people, so if you don\'t know well about voice phishing, you can get it and it\'s just a problem for some people.
>> CORRECT.
>> Or: At first, I thought it was just a new type of crime that mainly affected the elderly.
>> Or: I believed it only happened to some people, especially elderlies, who didn’t know much about voice phishing.
However, voice phishing has become more sophisticated and tricky with the development of the times and technologies, targeting not only the elderly but also all ages.
>> CORRECT.
In addition, it uses AI and is becoming a criminal organization.
>> In addition, scammers now use AI, and voice phishing has become an organized crime.
The voice phishing organization has a boss and appears to be made up of members, money collectors, and voice phishing callers.
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>> Or: A voice phishing group usually has a boss, members, money collectors, and callers.
Some of them know it\'s a crime, and others don\'t know it and participate.
>> CORRECT.
>> Or: Some know it\'s a crime, but others join without realizing it.
They\'ve fallen for the trick of being able to make a lot of money.
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>> Or: They are fooled into believing they can make a lot of money.
Furthermore, voice phishing is developing into an international crime and problem not only in Korea.
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>> Or: Voice phishing has become an international crime, not just a problem in Korea.
When voice phishing became impossible in Korea, they left for China or Southeast Asia and began to form and organization.
>> When voice phishing became difficult in Korea, they moved to China or Southeast Asia and formed organizations there.
The problem of kidnapping and crime in Cambodia, which has recently become a big issue, has also caused.
>> It has also led to big problems like kidnapping and crime issues in Cambodia.
In order to deal with this issue, Korea is working with Interpol and seeking cooperation from countries around the world.
>> CORRECT.
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