Have you seen a hospital that gives better benefits lately?
학생이 쓴 원문
Well, honestly, I don\'t know about the US hospitals\' benefits exactly. However, most city hospitals in the US tend to have good benefits for their employees such as pensions and insurances.
For example, in the case of Jacobi medical center in New York, they give the guarantee of retirement for employees so that they can work until their retirement age . Plus, the hospital acknowledges the careers of the past of workers such as that of South Korea, so they can receive a salary as an experienced nurse despite of new hiring in the US. Besides, for children of the employees, the hospital give subsidies 6000$ yearly per a kid regardless of the number of kids. Lastly, for the employees, there are many pension options called 401K. So, depending on the investment amount of their salaries, they can deposit their salaries on their 401K pension, and since from 10 years later, they could receive the pension until dying.
강사 첨삭
Hello there, [이름]! It\'s good to see you here on the composition page one again.
Going to your church really brings you a lot of goodness and blessings. You may not know a lot of hospital benefits before but as days go by, you can meet your fellow Korean nurses sharing their experiences and know-how of their lives as nurses there in New York.
As you have detailed below, these benefits are really enticing not only for you but also for your family especially your son. In the end, loyalty is also well-valued in the USA. So, always consider your options and live well and joyfully.
Below are very well-written sentences that you made wield by very good transition words and conjunctions. Moreover, your idioms and careful choices of words made this answer very easily understood and packed with meaning. Overall, excellent output!
See you again next time on this page!
-T. Donna~
>> Correct!
For example, in the case of Jacobi medical center in New York, they give the guarantee of retirement for employees so that they can work until their retirement age .
However, most city hospitals in the US tend to have good benefits for their employees such as pensions and insurances.
>> Correct! Very good sentence!
For example, in the case of Jacobi medical center in New York, they give the guarantee of retirement for employees so that they can work until their retirement age .
>> Correct! Very good sentence!
Plus, the hospital acknowledges the careers of the past of workers such as that of South Korea, so they can receive a salary as an experienced nurse despite of new hiring in the US.
>> Correct! Very good sentence!
Besides, for children of the employees, the hospital give subsidies 6000$ yearly per a kid regardless of the number of kids.
>> Besides, for children of the employees, the hospital give subsidies of $6000 yearly per a kid regardless of the number of kids.
Lastly, for the employees, there are many pension options called 401K.
>> Correct!
So, depending on the investment amount of their salaries, they can deposit their salaries on their 401K pension, and since from 10 years later, they could receive the pension until dying.
>> So, depending on the investment amount of their salaries, they can deposit their salaries on their 401K pension, and 10 years later, they could receive the pension until death.
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