Have your shopping habits changed over the years? In what ways?

2025-07-07 · 첨삭 강사 Sharon

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I have gradually improved my shopping habits over the recent years. Until my early 20s, I had a tendency to impulsively purchase attractive items whenever I wanted to have them. Although this habit of buying something spontaneously and recklessly led to excessive expenses, I didn\'t realize the seriousness of the problem. At that time, I had never experienced my own income, so I lacked financial sense. However, in 2021, I received a monthly salary for the first time from Korean Airforce, which helped me realize the value of money and become more mature. I also felt sorry for my parents\' previous support. After that, I started part-time jobs and came to embrace a habit of shopping only what I truly needed. Moreover, These days, I look for cheaper items rather than the best-performing ones, and I often seek out second-hand products or bargains.

강사 첨삭

Hi Isaac!
Please take note of the corrections below.
We will discuss them in class.
Try to keep them in mind for your future compositions.^^
~~ Teacher Sharon
I have gradually improved my shopping habits over the recent years. 
>> Correct
Until my early 20s, I had a tendency to impulsively purchase attractive items whenever I wanted to have them. 
>> Correct
Although this habit of buying something spontaneously and recklessly led to excessive expenses, I didn\'t realize the seriousness of the problem. 
>> Correct
At that time, I had never experienced my own income, so I lacked financial sense. 
>> At that time, I had never experienced earning my own income, so I lacked financial sense. 
However, in 2021, I received a monthly salary for the first time from Korean Airforce, which helped me realize the value of money and become more mature. 
>> However, in 2021, I received a monthly salary for the first time from the Korean Airforce, which helped me realize the value of money and become more mature. 
I also felt sorry for my parents\' previous support. 
>> I also felt sorry because of my parents\' previous support. 
After that, I started part-time jobs and came to embrace a habit of shopping only what I truly needed. 
>> After that, I started doing part-time jobs and I also came to embrace a habit of shopping only what I truly needed. 
Moreover, These days, I look for cheaper items rather than the best-performing ones, and I often seek out second-hand products or bargains.
>> Moreover, these days, I look for cheaper items rather than the best-performing ones, and I often seek out second-hand products or bargains.

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