having a competitive society
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Are there the advantages of having a competitive society? I don\'t know why people usually say that competitions are necessary for improving. There are so many ways to improve something, competition can be one for it, and it can work specific parts such as sports and elections. But competitions widely spread over almost all part of our life even art, learning, hobbies and SNS. Are these competitions improving our life? I swim every morning just because I like swimming, I try to swim faster it\'s because desire for improving something is human\'s nature, it\'s not because I love beating someone or competitions. I think most people are like me. Competitions means ranking people as 1st, 2nd and so on. People must not be treated as ranking or scores they gain. We are living in the capitalism, a first ranked company could survive easily, but people\'s life isn\'t like that. I think we try to get rid of many competitions in our life.
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Hi!
Thank you for submitting your answer and sharing your view about the homework question I sent.
It was nice to know your thoughts about a competitive society. I agree that we should try to get rid of much competition in our lives. Having the desire to improve and get better for ourselves, I think, is enough. It is a challenge we should face to develop as humans. Excessive competition with others is just exhausting and stressful.
It was nice to know your thoughts about a competitive society. I agree that we should try to get rid of much competition in our lives. Having the desire to improve and get better for ourselves, I think, is enough. It is a challenge we should face to develop as humans. Excessive competition with others is just exhausting and stressful.
~ Teacher Gina
>> Are there any advantages to having a competitive society?
I don\'t know why people usually say that competitions are necessary for improving.
>> CORRECT.
There are so many ways to improve something, competition can be one for it, and it can work specific parts such as sports and elections.
>> There are many ways to improve something. Competition can be one of them, and it may work well in specific areas such as sports and elections.
But competitions widely spread over almost all part of our life even art, learning, hobbies and SNS.
>> owever, competition has spread to almost every part of our lives, including art, education, hobbies, and SNS.
Are these competitions improving our life?
>> Are these competitions improving our lives?
I swim every morning just because I like swimming, I try to swim faster it\'s because desire for improving something is human\'s nature, it\'s not because I love beating someone or competitions.
>> I swim every morning because I enjoy swimming. I try to swim faster because the desire to improve is part of human nature, not because I love beating others or competing.
I think most people are like me.
>> CORRECT.
Competitions means ranking people as 1st, 2nd and so on.
>> Competition means ranking people as first, second, and so on.
People must not be treated as ranking or scores they gain.
>> People must not be treated based on the ranking or scores they gain.
We are living in the capitalism, a first ranked company could survive easily, but people\'s life isn\'t like that.
>> We live in a capitalist society, where a first-ranked company can survive easily, but people’s lives are different.
I think we try to get rid of many competitions in our life.
>> I think we try to get rid of much competition in our lives.
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