Having guns for self securing should not be allowe
학생이 쓴 원문
I didn't know that It is allowed to have guns in America for self defense.
I can't understand that a person has guns to save himself.
From whom can he save himself?
Having guns will pose a lethal danger to everyone.
I am sure a lot of gun accidents happen especially in America.
Some people insist that they possess guns for hunting.
However I heard that a lot of animals are in crisis of extinction because of relentless hunting.
Even though, guns are given to a person who has a certain certificate related to guns-possession, another person could even die if he do a little mistake when shotting.
It is also related to invisible fear.
The reason why the north attack the south is related to this problem.
They have been being shot at each other for about 50 years.
강사 첨삭
Hello [이름]!
Thank you for sending good compositions like this. I got what your point in here. I know that there are just so many reasons people would give to posses guns. But in most ways, they use it not in self-defense but for destruction. I agree to your idea. People shouldn ‘t be allowed of having their guns whether it’s licensed or not because this could probably cause devastation to many people. Anyway, let’s just hope that the government would do something about it. Moreover, I commend you for making minimal flaws in today’s writing. Just please check the spelling of the words and be cautious of the punctuation marks. Over all, you did a good job! Keep it up! Have a good day ahead and see you on Thursday! Keep safe! ^_^
T. Abby
Having guns for self securing should not be allowe
>> Having a gun for security should not be allowed.
I didn't know that It is allowed to have guns in America for self defense.
>> correctI can't understand that a person has guns to save himself.
>> I can’t understand the reason of people for having a gun just to defend/save themselves.From whom can he save himself?
>> correctHaving guns will pose a lethal danger to everyone.
>> correctI am sure a lot of gun accidents happen especially in America.
>> correctSome people insist that they possess guns for hunting.
>> correctHowever I heard that a lot of animals are in crisis of extinction because of relentless hunting.
>> correctEven though, guns are given to a person who has a certain certificate related to guns-possession, another person could even die if he do a little mistake when shotting.
>> Eventhough a gun is given to a person who has a license/certificate, another person could probably die if he does just a little mistake in shooting.It is also related to invisible fear.
>> It is also something to be feared/scared/afraid of. The reason why the north attack the south is related to this problem.
>> The reason why the North attacks the South is because to this problem.
>> The reason of the North for attacking our country is mostly related to this problem.They have been being shot at each other for about 50 years.
>> They have been fighting with other for about 50 years.
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