Health.

2020-06-26 · 첨삭 강사 Gabby

학생이 쓴 원문

Hi Gabby! It\'s raining whole day here today. According to forecast, it begin the rainy season. Well, I think it\'s important keep health. I know through my parents how important walking. Then I always walk, walk walk. I believe. Walking make healthily our body. I hope to be alive healthy life. And I crave to go to traveling. Also I hope to go to traveling in the world if I can do it. Maybe it\'s hopeless a my dream. I am to be healthy to that day. Is this enough that I have a reason to be healthy? Good night.

강사 첨삭

Hi Suzan. Great job. Keep improving. :)

- T Gabby

Hi Gabby!

>> Correct
It\'s raining whole day here today.

>> It\'s raining the whole day here.
According to forecast, it begin the rainy season.
>> There was a forecast that rainy season begins.
Well, I think it\'s important keep health.

>> Well, I think it\'s good for my health.
I know through my parents how important walking. Then I always walk, walk walk.

>> My parents taught me that walking is good. So I walk a lot.

I believe. Walking make healthily our body.

>> I believe that walking makes my body healthy.
I hope to be alive healthy life. And I crave to go to traveling.

>> I hope be alive and healthy because I want to travel more.
Also I hope to go to traveling in the world if I can do it. Maybe it\'s hopeless a my dream.

>> My hopeless dream is to travel the world if I can.
I am to be healthy to that day. Is this enough that I have a reason to be healthy?

>> I want to be healthy, is that an enough reason?
Good night.

>> Correct.

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