Health
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It has been increasing the problem about overweight. It\'s a taste of the thesedays. We have already tons of various food everywhere. Especially, the foods with high calories! So, we intake more calories than usual. Of course, some people take car of themselves health. But, the health food is usually more expensive than unhealthy foods. So, those who has difficulties with money couldn\'t buy the healthy ones in the grocery store or restaurants. I find the government come up with a plan for vulnerable social groups to diminish the number of people. They will have to let the healthy ingredients\' price down. Anyway, to be not a overweight and skinny fat person, we need to take some vitamins,exercise at least four times a week,and eat vegetables.
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Good evening [이름] Woon. Thank you for taking the time to work on this topic. ^_^
T. Irene
It has been increasing the problem about overweight.
>>> There is an increasing problem of being overweight.
It\'s a taste of the thesedays.
>>> It\'s because of the delightful taste of food these days.
We have already tons of various food everywhere.
>>> We already have tons of various food everywhere.
Especially, the foods with high calories!
>>> Correct.
So, we intake more calories than usual.
>>> Correct.
Of course, some people take car of themselves health.
>>> Of course there are still some people who take care of their health.
But, the health food is usually more expensive than unhealthy foods.
>>> But most healthy food is more expensive than common ones.
So, those who has difficulties with money couldn\'t buy the healthy ones in the grocery store or restaurants.
>>> So those who don\'t have much budget for healthy foods go for just anything.
I find the government come up with a plan for vulnerable social groups to diminish the number of people.
>>> I hope the government will come up with a plan for the vulnerable members of the society.
They will have to let the healthy ingredients\' price down.
>>> Maybe one way is for those healthy food to become cheaper.
Anyway, to be not a overweight and skinny fat person, we need to take some vitamins,exercise at least four times a week,and eat vegetables.
>>> Any, to stay fit, people should take vitamins, exercise at least four times a week, and eat a lot of different colored vegetables.
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