heavy snowing in seoul 3

2010-01-07 · 첨삭 강사 RJ

학생이 쓴 원문

We watched the news soon after we saw what was outside the house. The news said "The heaviest snowfall in 103 years, Amout of snowfall reaches to 25cm" After a short silence, my sis said "Well, I think you are more correct than supercomputers and hundreds of smart people in Meteorological Administration." I said "As I always said, They don't get it right whenever we need em." After a while.... I think it is 2 P.M. The voice came out from the speaker and said " Ah... Ah... Is it clear? We want middle and high school students to come out and help us clean the snow. We'll give you community service grades" The my sis and I came out (No, not to clean the snow, but to go out and look at the smow before it is cleaned up.) I need more space. I need part 4 too.

강사 첨삭

Hello [이름], Wow, it seems that you and your sister were really shocked by the amount of snow. I look forward to the continuation of your story. I wonder what will happen next? Teacher RJ   We watched the news soon after we saw what was outside the house. >>We watched the news right after we saw what was outside the house. The news said "The heaviest snowfall in 103 years, Amout of snowfall reaches to 25cm" >>The news said "This is the heaviest snowfall in Korea in 103 years. The amount of snowfall has reached 25cm." After a short silence, my sis said "Well, I think you are more correct than supercomputers and hundreds of smart people in Meteorological Administration." >>CORRECT I said "As I always said, They don't get it right whenever we need em.">>I said "As I always say, they don't get it right whenever we need 'em." After a while.... I think it is 2 P.M. The voice came out from the speaker and said " Ah... Ah... Is it clear? >>After a while... I think it was 2 PM, a voice came out from the speaker and said "Ah.. Ah.. Is it clear?" We want middle and high school students to come out and help us clean the snow. >>We want middle and high school students to come out and help us clear out the snow. We'll give you community service grades" The my sis and I came out (No, not to clean the snow, but to go out and look at the smow before it is cleaned up.)>>We'll give you community service grades", then my sis and I came out (No, not to clear the snow, but to go out and look at the smow before it is cleaned up.)I need more space. I need part 4 too. >>CORRECT

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