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Theme: [ESSAY] What\'s your thought on Emma Watson\'s speech for the HeForShe UN campaign or the message of her speech?
I think her speech is so good and touching.
And when I listened to that speech, I thought I want to be a faminist too.
I think faminism is good. Woman and man must to be equal. They are all people.
I want to be a faminist.
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Here\'s your edited homework, [이름]! I love reading about your thoughts on current issues! Well done!
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Jean~~
Theme: [ESSAY] What\'s your thought on Emma Watson\'s speech for the HeForShe UN campaign or the message of her speech?
I think her speech is so good and touching.
>> or: I personally think her speech was brilliant and moving. [\"Moving\" and \"touching\" are synonymous.]
And when I listened to that speech, I thought I want to be a faminist too.
>> And when I listened to that speech, I thought I want to be a feminist, too. [Mind the spelling of \'feminist\'.]
>> or: And when I listened to her speech, I thought I want to be a feminist as well.
I think faminism is good.
>> I believe feminism is a wonderful thing.
Woman and man must to be equal.
>> Women and men must be equal.
They are all people.
>> They are all people/humans.
I want to be a faminist.
>> So I want to be a feminist.
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