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This is my second composition to Power English. Now I'm going to write about my family. There are four members in my family. My dad, mom, older sister and me. My dad works in his business regarding distribution. He works hard and is very busy. My mother is housekeeper. My mom makes meals for our family everyday does our famaily's laundry. My older sister works at public kindergarten. She like her job that she really want to get before long time. I like to eat dinner with my family. It is good to live with my famaily. --------------------------------------------------------- Thanks you for reading my writing. Have a good day!

Hello [이름]! Thank you for having time working on this composition. I appreciate the information you're given me. You made some errors yet I admire your sentence constructions. You were able to use good vocabularies though you have to be careful of the spelling next time. Furthermore, be more familiar of the usage of prepositions and articles. Have constant practice and you will surely refine your English in no time. Enjoy what you're doing! Take care and see you! ABBY ~ This is my second composition to Power English.>> This is my second composition for Power English. Now I'm going to write about my family. >> Now, I'm going to write about my family. >> I'm going to write now about my family.There are four members in my family.>> We are four in the family. My dad, mom, older sister and me.>> CORRECT^^ My dad works in his business regarding distribution.>> My dad works with his business regarding distribution. >> My dad is a businessman.He works hard and is very busy.>> CORRECT^^My mother is housekeeper.>> My mother is a housekeeper. My mom makes meals for our family everyday does our famaily's laundry.>> My mom does all the chores at home and makes our meals everyday. >> My mom cooks our meals everyday and does the laundry. My older sister works at public kindergarten.>> My older sister works in a public kindergarten.She like her job that she really want to get before long time.>> She likes her job that she really wanted to have it before. I like to eat dinner with my family.>> I like eating dinner with my family.It is good to live with my famaily.>> It is good to live with my family. >> Living with my family is good. >> Being with my family is good.Thanks you for reading my writing. Have a good day! >> Thank you for reading my composition. Have a good day!