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2013-02-27 · 첨삭 강사 Alice

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I would like to go back to 8 years ago. During the summer of 2013, I traveled almost all around the Europe countries, including England, France, Italy, Austria, Czech, and Swiss. It was great experience for me because it was the first time traveling without parents. I was with my best friend and we met several companions to be with.While backpacking, we ate many delicious food and visited many famous places. The most memorable moment I have ever had was when I lied down on the grass right infront of the Effel Tower. My companions and me drank a bottle of beer and talk with each other, watching sunset. We spent all evening and we were finally able to see the light show of the Tower. It was so amazing that we could stay much longer and we l had to take a taxi to get to our hostel. Although we were just a backpacker and didn't have enough money, the experience I had earned during that time allows me to learn diverse cultures. These are the reasons why I want to go back to that time.

강사 첨삭

Hi there Summer! We have just talked, hihi. Anyway, that experience is really remarkable! Travel to Europe is a great treat for oneself. I wish I could go there too someday! You take care at the salon, Summer. See you again tomorrow!^^ ~Teacher Alice I would like to go back to 8 years ago. >> I would like to go back 8 years ago. During the summer of 2013, I traveled almost all around the Europe countries, including England, France, Italy, Austria, Czech, and Swiss. >> During the summer of 2013, I traveled almost all around the European countries, including England, France, Italy, Austria, Czech, and Switzerland. It was great experience for me because it was the first time traveling without parents. >> It was great experience for me because it was the first time to travel without my parents. I was with my best friend and we met several companions to be with. >> Correct! While backpacking, we ate many delicious food and visited many famous places. >> Correct!The most memorable moment I have ever had was when I lied down on the grass right infront of the Effel Tower. >> The most memorable moment I have ever had was when I lay down on the grass right in front of the Eiffel Tower. My companions and me drank a bottle of beer and talk with each other, watching sunset. >> My companions and I drank a bootle of beer and talk with each other while watching sunset. We spent all evening and we were finally able to see the light show of the Tower. >> Correct! >> OR: We spent all night and we were finally able to see the light show of the Tower. It was so amazing that we could stay much longer and we l had to take a taxi to get to our hostel. >> It was so amazing that we could stay much longer and we had to take a taxi (cab) to get to our hostel.Although we were just a backpacker and didn\'t have enough money, the experience I had earned during that time allows me to learn diverse cultures. >> Although, we were just backpakckers and didn\'t have enough money, the experience I had earned during that time allowed me to learn diverse cultures.These are the reasons why I want to go back to that time. >> Correct!

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