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Hello, Abby~ This is my third composition to Power English. I'll tell you about where I live. I live with my family in an apartment in the Anyang area. My apartment is in the 8th floor and it has a beautiful view of a park when I look out my window. There is 3 bedroom, a kitchen, a living room space for sofa and TV and a clean bathroom. I like to spend time watching DVD movie in the living room. What I like the most about my apartment is that my bedroom is big enough for my queen-sized bed. I feel really comfortable there. Although I have a desk for study, I often enjoy reading in my bed before I go to sleep. Thank you for review my composition. see you Abby.

Hello [이름]! Thank you again for making this excellent composition. You’ve used good words which are appropriate to your sentences. Furthermore, I’ve seen some errors though few but you still need to be cautious of. I want you then to be careful of your punctuation marks and be more familiar of the prepositions and articles as well as the sentence pattern to make your composition better. Enjoy and remember that making mistakes is just a part of learning. So always point out the errors and have time for improvements to fully refine your skill. Thank you once again and take care! See you later! “_) ABBY   Hello, Abby~ >> Hello Abby!This is my third composition to Power English.>> This is my third composition for Power English. I'll tell you about where I live.>> CORRECT I live with my family in an apartment in the Anyang area.>> I live with my family in an apartment in Anyang.My apartment is in the 8th floor and it has a beautiful view of a park when I look out my window.>> My apartment is at the 8th floor and you can see beautiful views over the window such as a park. >> My apartment is at the 8th floor where you could see a very beautiful view of a park over my window. There is 3 bedroom, a kitchen, a living room space for sofa and TV and a clean bathroom. >> It consists of three bedrooms, kitchen, living room and a clean bathroom. >> It has a kitchen, living room, clean bathroom and three bedrooms.I like to spend time watching DVD movie in the living room.>> I like spending time watching DVD movies in the living room. >> I like spending my time watching movies in the living room.What I like the most about my apartment is that my bedroom is big enough for my queen-sized bed.>> What I like most about my apartment is that my bedroom is big enough to occupy my queen-sized bed. I feel really comfortable there.>> I really feel comfortable staying there.Although I have a desk for study, I often enjoy reading in my bed before I go to sleep.>> Although I have a desk for studying, I often enjoy reading on my bed before going to sleep.Thank you for review my composition.>> Thank you for checking my composition.see you Abby. >> See you Abby!