Hello
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강사 첨삭
Hi there!
Thanks for sharing your thoughts here.
Becoming a president has a whole lot of responsibilities.
I think that whatever you are going to do when you will be the president, I know that you are responsible for it. haha.
Anyway, take care of yourself because it\'s raining. ^^
I\'ll see you later!
T. Angel ^^
Hi! Angel!
>> Hi Angel!
It\'s raining today from yesterday.
>> It\'s still raining from yesterday until today.
This week is very busy because the nexk week we are holiday.
>> This week is very busy because next week will be a holiday.
A few day ago, I read some book.
>> I read some books a few days ago.
The writer said that you want to come true your goal and then you must to do spend three hours in a day for ten years.
>> The writer said that if you want your goal to come true, you need to spend three hours in a day for ten years.
It looks easy, But It means that you have to spend preparing another time excpet three hours.
>> It looks like it\'s easy but it also means that you have to spend some time except for three hours.
I felt I really want to speak English fluently.
>> I feel like I really I want to speak English fluently.
>> I have to think of my goal many times before deciding.
Anyway, If I became a president I cut down work envrionment and reduce house rental fee.
>> Anyway, if I will become the president, I will cut down the work environment and I will also reduce the rental fees.
Because now I work 8 hours 5day in a week but it is very lots of time in a day.
>> Because I am now working for 8 hours in a day but I think it is a lot for a day.
I think 6 hours is the perfect environment.
>> correct!
And then people can be take care of thier family.
>> And then people can take care of their family.
Last my plan is to reduce house rental fee.
>>correct!
We paid alot.
>> We pay a lot.
So many people want to live a large size house but we will pay alot og money eventhough small one.
>> So many people want to live in a big house but we have to still pay a lot of money even though our house is small.
>> That\'s my opinion.
Have a nice day and see you soon!!
>> correct!^^
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