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2014-09-17 · 첨삭 강사 Naomi

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This is episode 2. After i got a Visa for America, i was soooo happy because going to America was one of my dream. But, that time, i was having hard time because of master of graduation. My univercity requires a master of graduation for graduation. So all students who want to graduation must make a master of graduation. But i was not interesting in my major. However i had to do. I had a team for master of graduation with my friends. You know, that time i was young, i mean i was not matured. So i made many troubles with my teammates. Our relations was getting worse. And i got stress everyday. Going to America was only the way that made me happy. When i thought about America, i could do everythings. Unfortunately, i failed to pass several times. hummm i don't want to think about that time. I think that it was the worst time in my entire life. But you know. GOD is always with me. I finally finished my project. lol. and then i got an airplan for America.... continue in next episode

강사 첨삭

Good day [이름]!

 

How are doing?

About your wring, you are very stubborn.kkk^^

I told you the pronoun I is always capital letter. I wanna fly there to tell you viz-a-viz.

Anyway, hmmm, well I\'m not in the position to say this but what happened to you and what you did is just OK.

If and only if you learned from it.^^

Failures makes you a matured person.

 But it doesn\'t mean you have fail a lot of times..kkk^^

The best part is you know that God is with you.

 

See you later.

 

-T.Naomi

 

This is episode 2.

>>correct

>>BETTER: Episode 2
After i got a Visa for America, i was soooo happy because going to America was one of my dream.

>>After I got a Visa for America, I was so happy because going to America was one of my dream.

But, that time, i was having hard time because of master of graduation. My univercity requires a master of graduation for graduation.

>>But, at that time, I was having hard time to graduate on my master\'s. My university requires master\'s degree to graduate.
So all students who want to graduation must make a master of graduation. But i was not interesting in my major.

>>So all students who wanted to graduate must take master\'s degree. But I was not interesting in my major.

However i had to do. I had a team for master of graduation with my friends. You know, that time i was young, i mean i was not matured.

>>However, I had to do it still. I had a master\'s team with my friends. You know, that time I was young, I mean I was not matured.

So i made many troubles with my teammates. Our relations was getting worse. And i got stress everyday.

>>So I faced many troubles with my teammates. Our relationship was getting worse and worse. And I was stressed everyday.

Going to America was only the way that made me happy. When i thought about America, i could do everythings.

>>Going to America was the only way that made me happy. When I thought about America, I could do everything.

Unfortunately, i failed to pass several times. hummm i don\'t want to think about that time.

>>Unfortunately, I failed to pass several times. hummm I don\'t want to think about that.

I think that it was the worst time in my entire life. But you know. GOD is always with me.

>>correct

I finally finished my project. lol. and then i got an airplan for America....
>>I finally finished my project. lol. And then I got a ticket to America.
continue in next episode

>>To be continue.

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