Hello
학생이 쓴 원문
강사 첨삭
Good day [이름]!
How are doing?
About your wring, you are very stubborn.kkk^^
I told you the pronoun I is always capital letter. I wanna fly there to tell you viz-a-viz.
Anyway, hmmm, well I\'m not in the position to say this but what happened to you and what you did is just OK.
If and only if you learned from it.^^
Failures makes you a matured person.
But it doesn\'t mean you have fail a lot of times..kkk^^
The best part is you know that God is with you.
See you later.
-T.Naomi
This is episode 2.
>>correct
>>BETTER: Episode 2
After i got a Visa for America, i was soooo happy because going to America was one of my dream.
>>After I got a Visa for America, I was so happy because going to America was one of my dream.
But, that time, i was having hard time because of master of graduation. My univercity requires a master of graduation for graduation.
>>But, at that time, I was having hard time to graduate on my master\'s. My university requires master\'s degree to graduate.
So all students who want to graduation must make a master of graduation. But i was not interesting in my major.
>>So all students who wanted to graduate must take master\'s degree. But I was not interesting in my major.
However i had to do. I had a team for master of graduation with my friends. You know, that time i was young, i mean i was not matured.
>>However, I had to do it still. I had a master\'s team with my friends. You know, that time I was young, I mean I was not matured.
So i made many troubles with my teammates. Our relations was getting worse. And i got stress everyday.
>>So I faced many troubles with my teammates. Our relationship was getting worse and worse. And I was stressed everyday.
Going to America was only the way that made me happy. When i thought about America, i could do everythings.
>>Going to America was the only way that made me happy. When I thought about America, I could do everything.
Unfortunately, i failed to pass several times. hummm i don\'t want to think about that time.
>>Unfortunately, I failed to pass several times. hummm I don\'t want to think about that.
I think that it was the worst time in my entire life. But you know. GOD is always with me.
>>correct
I finally finished my project. lol. and then i got an airplan for America....
>>I finally finished my project. lol. And then I got a ticket to America.
continue in next episode
>>To be continue.
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